Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that History is one of the most beneficial school subjects. However, there is other opinion that states that Science and Technology are more important than History. In my view, both subjects are equally important.

History is considered as an important subjects because it provides many benefits to those learning it. First, through learning History, students can be taught about moral values that were reflected in the struggle of their predecessors to achieve the freedom of their nations. Hard-working, not easily giving up, and having high dedication to nations are the example of those moral values. Those moral values are amazing, yet often forgettable these days. So, by learning History, students are remembered about those moral values again. Second, History contains lectures about the formation stories of many countries, including pupils' home countries. Nowadays, many students don't have knowledge about it, so it is very important to educate them. Moreover, because learning History often involving the act of memorizing, it can also help to increase students' left brain abilities.

On the other side, Science and Technology subjects are also essential. Students live in the millennial era, where technology has developed faster than before. Internet offers wide varieties of interesting facilities, including lecture videos, tutorial tips, and online games. But, if students don't have a good understanding about how to use it, it will cause negative impacts in their life. So it is very important to teach them through the Technology subjects. Science is also a significant subject, since it often requires students to solve complex mathematical problems, that can help students to increase their right brain abilities. Besides it, it can also make students achieve new skill such as critical thinking and problem solving skills.

In conclusion, neither History nor Science and Technology are less important. Both subjects are equally important, because each of them has their own positive impacts to the pupils.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, in conclusion, such as, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52063492063 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68485107521 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565079365079 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8479198693 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.95 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.75 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243419647082 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0857197421339 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0992498058067 0.0667982634062 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214879362732 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.19589314208 0.056905535591 344% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.44 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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flaws:
You got 6 out of 9 mainly because the essay is not outstanding, look at this attribute:

Unique words percentage: 0.565079365079 0.561755894193 101% => OK

'Unique words percentage' is in the average level. so don't repeat words or sentences,

for example: 'both subjects are equally important.' come in the first paragraph and the last paragraph.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 317 350
No. of Characters: 1680 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.22 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.3 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.625 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.85 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.922 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.492 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5