Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

Some people opine that music is beneficial in uniting people with different cultural and age background. I completely agree with this statement that music is advantageous in joining people regardless of their age and culture differences because of two reasons.

Firstly, music serves as a common interest in helping people to communicate and building relationship. This is because music can be enjoyed by all kinds of people, who come from various age range and cultural backgrounds. For example, Michael Jackson has a lot of fans for his music, ranging from old people to younger people, and from USA to other countries. Those people then will form a group or fans club which mainly discuss about Michael Jackson's music. From that group, lot of conversations started to happen and they begin to build friendship.

Secondly, music is often used by its writers or musicians to convey positive message which will help unite people, ranging from love to world peace. The listeners or the music fans then will understand and will mostly be affected by the message it has. For instance, Michael Jackson's song entitled Heal the World was written to spread a message to people to increase child awareness, especially to those who needs help. As a result, many of the listeners from around the world were affected and got Michael Jackson's message of this song, and were touched to increase their child awareness level.

In conclusion, I completely agree that music is helpful in uniting people despite their age and culture differences because music serves as a common interest in helping people to communicate and building relationship and music is often used by its writers or musicians to convey positive message which will help unite people.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1461.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10839160839 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62434658017 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482517482517 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.199752632 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.75 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41666666667 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250948270794 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116947140689 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116972616673 0.0667982634062 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206457638133 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139405599176 0.056905535591 245% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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