Some people say International sports events help in world peace. Do you agree or disagree?

Gone are the days when unions battle with each other , since Greece created Olympic Games which has been used as an alternative of wars. Some critics argue that International sports events can reduce the proportion of violence and friction among certain countries, while I do not share their view.

Admittedly, international sports events indeed replace some argument which should have been solved by wars. It is widely accepted that these events serve as symbols of country power and status, which had been previously mirrored by weapon and army. For instance, according to a recent research, the ranking of Olympic Games is equivalent to country power ranking, which help those less developed countries figure out their position with regard to their country power. Consequently, international sports events contribute positively to avoiding conflicts among countries.

Nevertheless, the negative aspects result from international sports events should be aware of as well. Initially, these events are not able to resolve certain fundamental issues. For example, territory dispute cannot be fixed by these grand sport meetings, considering that countries struggle for resources and lands, which is closely associated with lives of human beings. Moreover, international sports events also frequently bring about arguments between two countries. Audiences always support their player from their own country, which might trigger hostile emotions or behaviors against the audience from competitor’s countries. What’s more, sometimes the dispute among audience would deteriorate relationship among countries.

In a word, basing on the discussion on both sides, I believe that international sports events slightly affect the world peace rather than preserving it.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, moreover, nevertheless, so, well, while, for example, for instance, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1519.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.86486486486 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86313799381 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.664092664093 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4687036651 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.846153846 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9230769231 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23076923077 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205951956234 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842268201151 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071928691396 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134134534922 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186417593416 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.71 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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