Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Whether or not music unites people from different cultural backgrounds and generations is a moot point. In my view, it does not, on the whole.
With respect to cultural relations, one might think that music would enhance them because so many modern songs are sung in English. However, in practice, music is overwhelmingly listened to by oneself, often online, when travelling, or simply when relaxing at home. Of course, some people travel abroad to attend concerts of internationally renowned musicians but even then, the opportunities for real dialogue with concert-goers from other countries is very limited. The main focus of such trips is appreciating the music. Similarly, sharing comments about music on international websites like YouTube is a very superficial way of relating to foreigners. Consequently, I believe that there are few opportunities for music to make a real contribution to cultural relations.
The ability of music to unite the generations is even more limited, in my view. Although I accept that music used at national commemorations has a unifying effect on the generations within a nation. on the whole, older people and younger people tend to prefer wildly different forms of music. With respect to the former group, jazz, classical music and generally relaxing musical genres are frequently their preferences in many countries. In contrast, a large proportion of younger people opt for high-tempo types of music such as rap, hip-hop and various forms of dance music. If anything, the substantial differences between the musical tastes of the younger and older generations drive the generations apart, rather than unify them.
In summary, the role of music in helping people of varying ages and cultures to come closer to each other is, in my opinion, quite limited.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, similarly, so, then, in contrast, in summary, of course, such as, in my opinion, in my view, on the whole, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31010452962 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97225001883 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606271777003 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3952055741 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.6 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1333333333 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2666666667 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247355949327 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841939406254 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618949057698 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161900775483 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0141324958046 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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