In recent years, people inclined to think that governments should only demonstrate chronologically historical events as well as a time-honoured culture of their own country via museums and art exhibitions, rather than works of the other areas in the world. Personally, I disagree with this point of the view.
On the one hand, in my opinion, the acquisition of foreign history along with cultural customs will bring many benefits to both the indigenous people and overseas visitors. Firstly,to be specific,the local residents could have valuable opportunities to magnify their minds to historical aspects happened in other parts in the world,namely the process of protecting those populace's peculiar countries from foreign invaders and developing themselves to reach the future prosperity, happiness and freedom for local residents living contemporarily and subsequent generations,therefore,it will broaden local people’s horizons through veritable pictures describing practical scenes about intrepid and faithful people in the war together with tranquil views of daily lifestyles and works occurred during many centuries,and concrete artefacts bear testament to forefather intelligence and creativeness of those particular countries. Apparently, there is no denying that the exhibition of foreign history and culture will not only disseminate new knowledge for the indigenous people but also make overseas tourists could discern the intrinsic beauty of traditions or history of their own country showed in there that render foreigners intriguing and be warmly welcomed from host country where they arrived. Secondly, in my perspective, local residents could comprehend more foreign languages and folklore existing surrounding the world without expending much money on peregrinations to those particular countries to experience and accumulate so that their personal budget would be saved economically
On the other hand, I believe that museums and art galleries always show historical and cultural values of their own country that would propel viewers into an irksome and uninteresting way. For instance, if viewers at home and abroad do not come to those museums, as a result, it would make them lose attraction to people from all walks of life, especially young demographic, besides those museums will diminish gradually their own annual income and perhaps they may disclose temporarily. Thus, the governments should impose lucrative policies to impulse people to museums, and one of the effective strategies is the exhibition of historical and cultural angles from another country.
In conclusion, it seems to me that host museums or art galleries should combine domestic history together with culture and their overseas counterparts in order to make people can feel fascinated and learn something new synchronously.
- Some people think that museums and art galleries should concentrate on the history and art of their own country rather than the works of art of other parts of the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? 89
- Some people think that the government wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view? 89
- People living in large cities today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns? 89
- The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. 78
- Some people think it is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment for people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 78
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 10.4138276553 240% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2410.0 1615.20841683 149% => OK
No of words: 418.0 315.596192385 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.76555023923 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15929720923 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 176.041082164 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576555023923 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 747.9 506.74238477 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 46.0 20.2975951904 227% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 194.607867832 49.4020404114 394% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 267.777777778 106.682146367 251% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 46.4444444444 20.7667163134 224% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 21.6666666667 7.06120827912 307% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157134454999 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683160243676 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0294786184977 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0899966731067 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346064786235 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.0 13.0946893788 221% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 7.87 50.2224549098 16% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.6 11.3001002004 209% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 17.07 12.4159519038 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.83 8.58950901804 126% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 78.4519038076 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 20.4 10.1190380762 202% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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