some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Other say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In the recent times, due to new technology children spend most of their time in playing games or socializing themselves on the internet. some people motivate their children to engage in organized group activities. However, some parents disagree with the above statement because they believe that children can learn skills themselves. I agree that parents should let indulge children in organized group programs. Let us discus both the given points in detail in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, there are several advantages of taking part in organized group programs for children. First and foremost, primary benefit is that children can develop their social skills. To explain, child can learn how to interact with people in their society and also learn from team building activities such as working in a group. If children can take part in group activities, they learn the importance of working with their teammates to achieve their common goal and such skills will benefit them in their future. To illustrate, a survey conducted by the National Sample Survey Office, in 2009 in New Delhi, on a group of 500 children ranging between 12-20 years, revealed that 82% of them preferred to take part in organized group activities because they believed that through these activities they learnt importance of working with the team.
On the contrary, few people assert that children can learn themselves how to manage their free time. Primarily, some parents giving the freedom to their children so that they can learn to take up challenges and responsibility. To elaborate, few people believe that self management of their time helps the child to learn different things and they become more independent. these activities not only keep them engaged, but also help them discover their hidden talents. For instance, Mr. Benjamin Bradlee, Editor-in-chief of 'The Washington Post' in his April 2012,editorial on 'Self Independence for the Children are A Bane or Boon', stated that children who manage their time themselves are more independent.
In my opinion, some parents should encourage their children to indulge in group activities that are beneficial for the growth of the children. To clarify, I believe so because these activities can help the children to develop their overall personality and also improve their skills.To exemplify, a research conducted by the Oxford University, in 2019, in the UK, on a group of 600 children, ranging between 15-22 years, revealed that 89% of them believed that these activities enhance the confidence levels and also improved their skills.
To encapsulate, parents should encourage their child to take part in organized group activities because these activities help them to become responsible citizens to take part in different activities so they become more independent.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 24.0651302605 233% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 41.998997996 171% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2377.0 1615.20841683 147% => OK
No of words: 447.0 315.596192385 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31767337808 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76254379586 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.440715883669 0.561755894193 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 716.4 506.74238477 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 4.76152304609 315% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.3752373317 49.4020404114 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.055555556 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8333333333 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72222222222 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.481616199877 0.244688304435 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.189072309908 0.084324248473 224% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0818143014769 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.303726549817 0.151304729494 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394692820703 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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