Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work well in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as whole. Do you agree or disagree?
Volunteer jobs are relatively common for the young people who has not particular experiences. In this way, teenagers attain experience without getting paid. Some people argue that this would be beneficial for all teenagers. I am not completely agree with this statement because money is a significant reason for some of them. In this essay, I will outline why I think that some teenagers are reluctant to contribute for helping their communities without getting paid.
To begin with, money is significant factor to give them freedom. On that age, the majority of teenager’s are rely on families support. If they earned money, it would let them to spend it on particular hobbies or particular jobs in which they are so interested. For example, as a teenager would like to learn music instrument in the leisure time and it cost a lot for some parents to offer it. So it is better off for teenagers to get involved into the community while they find mutual interest.
Despite that money is an incentive for young people to be more counterproductive in their community, it is undoubtedly volunteer jobs are valuable for teenagers. First, attaining experience and feel of importance couldn’t gain easily if this kind of opportunity would not exist. For instance, as a young people if you could help older people to learn computer freely and ease their daily jobs with this recent technology, it definitely leads to more confidence and besides attain skills how to teach. So, boosting skills could be done only if you have this intention.
All in all, it is not bad idea to contribute to local community because in that way might find a valuable experiences. But, earning money would persuade more teenagers to be counterproductive into their community because they find benefits on it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'relied'.
Suggestion: relied
...ge, the majority of teenager's are rely on families support. If they earned mon...
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Line 9, column 120, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'volunteered'.
Suggestion: volunteered
...e in their community, it is undoubtedly volunteer jobs are valuable for teenagers. First,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1510.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05016722408 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92828416587 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528428093645 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1194905124 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.375 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6875 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254030711164 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897800599668 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503950386654 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161271274473 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311568241458 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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