Some people think that computers and the Internet are more important for a child's education than going to school. But others believe that schools and teachers are essential for children to learn effectively. Discuss both views and give your opinion
The ways in which children today study, both at home and school, are radically different from any previous generation, and the increased availability and relatively low price of modern technology have been instrumental in this change. However, I feel that while modern technologies, such as computers and the Internet, are important in assisting a child’s learning, this learning should be guided and directed by the experiences of teachers.
There is no denying the fact that computers and the internet are popularly used in the field of the education; they can present knowledge in a vivid and novel way. The computer and the internet can also enable students in enhancing their general understanding of how to solve difficulties in study as well as giving them vital skills in readiness for later life. However, the problems are: the information that the computer can show has to be pre-programmed and needs constant updating, for example Encyclopedia’s on DVD-ROM; and contrary to popular belief, the internet may not be a reliable source for knowledge, since there is often conflicting information available when taken from different sources.
A traditional and long-established practice is for children to study and gain knowledge at school, learning skills in various ways taught by traditional methods. A school is a place where students gather to be educated and learn from each other as well as from formal educators. At school, student’s development is orchestrated stage by stage, step by step by experienced teachers, and their acquisition of knowledge is guided and backed up in a systematic way.
I do not believe that it will help students to learn effectively and in long-term manner to overemphasizing the use of computers and the Internet. Rather, I feel the modern technologies can complement more traditional teaching and learning methods, without being used as a replacement for these traditions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'step by'.
Suggestion: step by
...lopment is orchestrated stage by stage, step by step by experienced teachers, and their acquisi...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a systematic way" with adverb for "systematic"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...on of knowledge is guided and backed up in a systematic way. I do not believe that it will help ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, well, while, as to, for example, i feel, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1640.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37704918033 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26609713365 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567213114754 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.5680608902 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.0 106.682146367 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5 20.7667163134 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251993501155 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.096077214219 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0282160130791 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144605563453 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0128949592057 0.056905535591 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.52 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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