Some people think the modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, people are experiencing a better life than what it was throughout human being history. With the development of innovative technology,the world is becoming increasinly smaller,people from different countries can contact each other much frequently and easily,only with a click on computer. However, technology also has its negative impact on society. I'm going to talk about both of them in the following paragraphes.

Firstly, there is no doubt that technology has a pretty positive impact on society. The world has changed a lot due to various inventions. it is beyond our immagination that we can contact a foreign friend even though we never got access to his country before. For example,youths are familiar with the internet applications,like facebook and wechat. they prefer to make friends on line,we can make a video phone call and send our selfies to share our happiness and sorrow. Technology narrows the gap between different continents and gather people from different cultures together.

Secondly, technology also does harm to our communities because life is becoming significantly convoluted and unsafe these days. For example,people who live in beijing have to face extreamly serious sand storms due to the air polution caused by
manufactory industry surrouding the city.thus,people have to wear masks everyday,which makes them more unconfortable.
Moreover,people have to tackle more traffic accidents because of an increasing number of personal cars,which makes individuls easier to get injured.

In conclusion, technology benefits our life,brings more fun to people all over the world.Meanwhile, it also has negative influence on our society. we'd better take advantage of the merits and avoid the shortcomings as many as posible.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61797752809 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.3440932258 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65543071161 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.0970014925 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 20.0 5.01903807615 398% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189690933808 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534910499864 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440572796752 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102252613767 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368735891155 0.056905535591 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.02 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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