Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that the children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more successful adults.
Discuss both views and give your opinion
Training children appropriately is a serious matter which concerns parents, principles and society. There are various views about whether children should compete or cooperate in their lives. I personally agree with those who believe that a child who is taught to cooperate will be more normal and useful adult.
On the one hand, when children start competing they try to find an effective way to succeed. They learn hard-work as they compete. They test new ways and sometimes they have to overcome their fears, which improves their creativity, self-confident and experience. Moreover, they would be more successful to find their favourite job in a competitive society in the future. They learn to live on their own and act effectively in their personal lives and society, which make a high-quality life with a sense of satisfaction.
On the other hand, I believe that competition might have negative effects on children's thinking. For example; during competition children undergo a great stress because they want to win and if they do not get their goals, they end up with frustration, which leads to anxiety. During a competition, children are selfish and careless about their friends so competition turns their friends to their competitors, which spoils intimacy among them and increase the sense of loneliness. I think that children who learn to co-operate rather than compete have sound and normal character. They learn to share their ideas with their friends and help them when they are in trouble. They do not try to make themselves divers from their friends, which makes a strong sense of love and friendship and also decrease the stress level. Cooperation teaches teamwork to children and also teach them how to respect other's ideas and achievements. Cooperative children can easily match with society's changes. They are flexible and can work with big companies and have a wide circle of friends.
In conclusion, although children with a sense of competition may succeed in some ways, I personally believe that cooperative children are more useful for both themselves and society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, moreover, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19526627219 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78311016334 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53550295858 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8686953979 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5555555556 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7777777778 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61111111111 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243056047246 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0954169869304 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848254822636 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196768326605 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.085737233449 0.056905535591 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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