Thesedays, criminal education is of prime importance in any country, however the way it plays out is often a pretty controversial topic.While I agree that asking people who have been released from prison to talk to students in school is a good approach, I also believe that there are better alternatives to this problem for the following reasons.
Admittedly, teenagers may be aware of the consequences of engaging in criminal activity when attending a talk with former inmates. As a consequence ,their life stories are often considered the most convincing evidence and this can attract the attention of students easily.In other words, these ex-criminals are real-life examples of how people pay the price for their violations of the law, which can raise awareness of law-abiding citizens among young people. To exemplify this point, a series of legal education programs through former prisoners on Vietnamese television channels were recorded and broadcast, and it received a lot of success. This proves that this form of criminal education is effective .
However, I believe that a combination of different educational methods will bring more desirable results than having a former inmate hold talks. Primarily, parents should be pioneers in educating children at an early age about social evils and how to prevent them. In fact , it has long been recognized that the family environment has a profound effect on child development, and a significant proportion of juvenile crime stems from criminals not being adequately educated from an early age. For example, according to an investigation the FBI , which is part of the U.S Department of Justice, showed that in 2017 up to 11 percent of juvenile offenders thereby poor family education. In addition, teachers at schools also play an important role in raising the awareness of students about crime. Moral lessons must not be neglected in the classroom, it is necessary to promote a positive educational environment, contributing to the prevention of crime.
In conclusion , in my opinion, a talk given by ex-offenders, albeit effective, is not the best education method for crime education.
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also, but, however, if, may, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1809.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32058823529 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03839984991 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632352941176 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.083798645 49.4020404114 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.75 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3333333333 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.91666666667 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145706881795 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459793177119 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478671484918 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0970740518132 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504846438247 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.95 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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