Some say that the government should stop supporting the professional sports activities and the cultural performances, and instead begin supporting schools to encourage children to take up sports and arts. What is your opinion?
A large proportion of a nation's budget is allocated to support athletes and cultural performers. However, some people believe that the government should stop spending for these activities and instead focus on supporting schools and encourage students to take up sports and arts. I strongly agree with this argument for three main reasons.
Firsty, the expenditures to support professional athletes and cultural performers is tremendously expensive. Although they bring honor to their country, only a small number of people benefit from it. To illustrate my point, supporting athletes in international completion costs an arm and a leg even if the chance of getting the trophy is very slim. It would be most beneficial if the government use their money in providing and developing gyms and theater stages in schools as this is a sure guarantee of a fun and productive experience for all students.
Secondly, it is not necessary for a country to join all kinds of sports and arts competition as they are not really a big deal for a nation’s pride. The only international game I consider vital is the Olympic since this bring unity and symbolizes peace for the whole world. If they only focus on this event, they will be able to train their athletes very well and also save a lot of money.
Lastly, if the government focus more on promoting sports and arts in schools, majority of the students will be able to develop sportsmanship and build self-confidence that can definitely help them once they graduate and start working. It will also help a number of students who are struggling with pear pressure and are doing bad vices as these subjects this will divert their attentions especially that they now have places and activities to do during their free time.
All in all, supporting professional sports and cultural performers is a very expensive and not always an assurance that they will bring pride to one's nation. It would rather be best to support the young students since they hold their country's future success.
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, lastly, really, second, secondly, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1698.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00884955752 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81710760012 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542772861357 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4229755675 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.285714286 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2142857143 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209963172882 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805603823178 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116364687349 0.0667982634062 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136476372889 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121113529447 0.056905535591 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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