Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects especially at the primary level.
Do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that the arts are just as valid as other subjects, especially for primary school
children. This essay agrees with that statement and will first discuss how some students
flourish when studying music, art or drama, and then talk about how maths and science
are not crucial at the primary level.
Not everyone has a talent for mathematics, physics or languages and many students
only do their best work when they can be creative. In fact, many pupils simply cannot
focus on traditional subjects unless they are expressing themselves creatively through
painting, song or dance. Take Gillian Lynne, for example, who at a young age was told
she had a learning difficulty, but in fact could not learn without moving her body. Gillian,
a typical kinaesthetic learner, went on to become a world-famous choreographer, but
would never have been a success without the encouragement of her dance teacher.
Others would disagree with this view and say that arts-related subjects stop young
children from spending enough time on the more ‘serious’ subjects and passing
important exams. However, until children get to high school, it is more important for
them to have a good attitude towards education than pass tests. For instance, in
Finland, elementary school children do no tests at all and focus on all disciplines qually. This allows children to choose the subjects they prefer and has been shown to
be one of the leading factors in their having the best education system in the world.
In conclusion, painting, dance and acting should be given equal status in the primary
classroom because they allow artistic children to learn more effectively and it is unwise
to put pressure on children to pass maths and science exams at such a young age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, then, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1530.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2397260274 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73231875377 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623287671233 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.5451698605 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.090909091 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5454545455 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27272727273 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.38176352705 456% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 27.0 5.01903807615 538% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261763032444 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0873862842246 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814390899934 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0671024792002 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.079730675077 0.056905535591 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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