Everybody expects children to be sincere and obedient. But some people believe that deterioration of children's behavior is because of their parents whereas other think that schools are at guilty. I am going to discuss or explore both sides of the coin but ultimately prove that schools are majorly responsible.
To start off, nowadays life of parents has become stressful and they vent out all their frustration at home. Moreover, Children are great at picking up habits from their parents. As a result, behavioral habits of parents get reflected in their kids and this further leads to degeneration of the way kids behave. For example, a recent American study that was being conducted for the last 20 years revealed shocking results. It showed that 65% of American children become criminals because at least one parent in the household committed violent crimes in the past. Furthermore, one can also claim that, the way children behave is governed by the way they are treated by their parents at home. If the child is made to feel as an outcast in the family then it largely effects the child's mental well being negatively. For instance, children usually take to drugs and become aggressive when they do not get approval they need from their parents.
However, there is no shadow of doubt that kids spend most of their time in schools. Parents or guardians have absolutely no control over the company of their children. And, if a child keeps bad company at school, that results in degradation of their personality. To illustrate this, a door to door survey of parents showed at least 90% of them alleging, that, their kid's questionable nature is due to the bad friends at school. Moreover, children nowadays face plethora of bullying at school, and unfortunately, school authorities have failed to provide an elixir. As a result, kids demeanor reflect increased amount of arrogance, disrespect, disobedience, anger, aggression and several other mental problems. For instance, an ongoing research by the Australian Society of Children Welfare at Schools (ASCWS) focuses on effects of bullying and its problematic effect on kids. Surprisingly, the initial numbers, however, are extremely disturbing and alarming.
To conclude, even though children follow their parents footsteps, but, schools play a larger role in shaping up the behavioral patterns of their pupils. I am in support of the fact that schools are majorly accountable for the breakdown of kids behavior.
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'ongoing research'.
Suggestion: ongoing research
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, whereas, at least, for example, for instance, as a result, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2072.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 402.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15422885572 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75887581408 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559701492537 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.9442414559 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6666666667 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219031378874 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701264096898 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525284980348 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162226679535 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434821589693 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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