A majority of the pupils are likely to spend most of their time by engaging themselves in front of the tv and does not involve in extra circular activities.This essay agrees that parents and children should have some time limit to watch television and then submit a possible solution which will be most viable one.
In the past few year there has been a drastic change in means of technology and it has widely affect children of age between 10-18,where they would like to spend their time either on computer or on television.They prefer to even play games on the system itself.The variety of programs telecasted will work as disillusionment and kids are much attracted towards it. A recent survey conducted by university of masschusetts found that 89%of the students at a university score less than 50% that is B grade in their general academics and when consulted with their parents whined about their kids are more on tv and spend the time only when the exams approach very near.
A possible solution is the parents should play a significant role and help them to suggest how to make use of time . parents should also arrange some trips once in a week so that kids might have a idea how the outside world is like. Even outdoor games can also be arrange in the porch itself so that can also maintain physical health of one.Attending party can also play a crucial role in building up social development, get together could also work out.Times recently reported that children who was engage in this creative activities are likely to have more IQ than whose to prefer to be on home with their tv sets.
In conclusion encouragement comes from motivated, dedication and child has to understand the world is not limited just in home or they will be like frog in a well and should differentiate between real life and the one which is on screen.New innovations build a new character and can help them to climb the ladder of success.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then, well, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69321533923 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67490419581 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557522123894 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 48.0 20.2975951904 236% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 104.191738479 49.4020404114 211% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 227.285714286 106.682146367 213% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 48.4285714286 20.7667163134 233% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211094781853 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877520726595 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05465078976 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116422854042 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596854773682 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.9 13.0946893788 190% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.22 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.8 11.3001002004 184% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.81 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 9.78957915832 286% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 21.2 10.1190380762 210% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 21.0 10.7795591182 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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