Today, televison is one of the most essential electronic devices in our houses. Talent shows consist in interesting shows on TV and people enjoy watching them for entertainment. The organizers declare that they use these show to find talented people, but in my view, these shows are just entertainment.
Firstly, I assure that the main purpose of talented shows is to gain a lot of money as much as they can. They don't organize the shows for free. For this financial aim, they try to generate many false or exaggerated situations to attract the audiences to watch their shows on TV. The more people watch their show, the more money they get from advertisements. For example, when I watched a talent shows called Vietnam Got Talent on TV, there was a funny situation, but It was fairly easy to find out that situation had happened with previously prepared scenario.
Secondly, talent shows often have no limit for examinee's performance. Examinees can sing, draw, do some magic or show some their special abilities. However, there are often 3 or 4 judges with different backgrounds, typically they are singer, model or musician so it's difficult for them to assess the performance of the examinees fairly. Also the judges are often affected by the organizers so they can make some unfair decisions. For example, if there are 2 people taking part in the contest, a person has quite better performance than the other but the other person is more beautiful, the judges affected by the organizers will tend to choose the more good-looking one because a good-looking examinee gains more the audiences for the shows.
Televised talent shows are not the only method to discover talented people. There are many other ways to do this such as organizing academic contest or specialized contest. These sorts of contest focus on one field so it will be easier and more effective to detect extremely talented people in that field.
In conclusion, to a certain extent, televised talent shows can find a handful of talented people but the aim of these shows are also constant - to gain money. We have plenty of better alternatives of finding talent. So everyone shouldn't be bordered with this problem, we just simply enjoy the shows.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'in my view']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.237980769231 0.247107183377 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.153846153846 0.155533422707 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0961538461538 0.0946595960268 102% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0576923076923 0.0501214627716 115% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0504807692308 0.0437548338989 115% => OK
Prepositions: 0.105769230769 0.122226691241 87% => OK
Participles: 0.03125 0.0403226058552 77% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.69201491799 2.80594681477 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.03125 0.0326793684256 96% => OK
Particles: 0.00240384615385 0.00163938923432 147% => OK
Determiners: 0.100961538462 0.0861772015684 117% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0144230769231 0.021408717616 67% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00240384615385 0.011925033212 20% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2223.0 1933.35771543 115% => OK
No of words: 376.0 316.048096192 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.91223404255 6.12580529183 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.20517956788 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.335106382979 0.374742101984 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.242021276596 0.28420135186 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.186170212766 0.203846283523 91% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.114361702128 0.137316102897 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69201491799 2.80594681477 96% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.037074148 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521276595745 0.56093040696 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 56.8832172987 60.7387585426 94% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0891783567 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.7894736842 20.7743622355 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1901293484 49.517814964 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 127.492653851 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7894736842 20.7743622355 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.736842105263 0.814263465372 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.99599198397 100% => OK
Readability: 43.9916013438 49.1944974215 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.43119266055 1.69124875643 85% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35187163271 0.332605444948 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.12363896657 0.102741220458 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.063340574639 0.0668466124924 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.510249904513 0.534860350844 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.138118570985 0.148594505496 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141714127937 0.134430193775 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0913193612954 0.0742795772207 123% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.290213782255 0.324371583561 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0472041634191 0.0638462369009 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258933580574 0.228012699653 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0898502217094 0.058150111329 155% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.68436873747 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 5.90881763527 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.5751503006 78% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 10.4468937876 153% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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