Write about the following topic For many young people today shopping is their favourite free time activity Why do you think this has happened Should young people be encouraged to do different activities in their free time Give reasons for your answer and

Recently, young generation people have started giving a lot of importance to appearance and enjoy working towards it, especially clothing. Most of them keep shopping frequently to be in line with the changing fashion trends. Moreover, shopping has become their favourite free time activity from all other activities.

There are many reasons that explain this choice of activity. Young people have become very particular about their appearance, mainly what they wear. At this age, being popular and noticeable is considered very important. Some of them feel repeating clothes is not good for their personality, so they keep buying more clothes. Also, as they want to be on track with the latest fashion trend, they often keep purchasing clothes. It is observed that young girls and women are more inclined towards this activity. The more choices of clothes they get, the more they keep purchasing. It is also seen that shopping makes some women happy and satisfied. For instance, when I would go shopping for a dress to wear for any occasion, it would instantly brighten up my mood.

Though shopping is the most preferred activity for many, other activities should also be encouraged. One should put in some time in other curricular too such as reading, cooking, exercising or other physical activities. Too much shopping will result in spending a lot of money and stocking unnecessary clothing. Also, if this becomes a habit, it will be difficult to save money during hard times. If shopping is an enjoyable activity, it should be done under certain restrictions. For instance, buying only required clothing rather than buying too much.

To conclude, one should not be inclined towards one activity, but make other activities a part of life too. This will reduce the chances of hasty purchases and give an opportunity to learn new things every day.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, for instance, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11842105263 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62478563958 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588815789474 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.1601148222 49.4020404114 39% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.8 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 7.06120827912 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272643982255 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0772970877486 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615273287573 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158777494419 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536641226085 0.056905535591 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.82 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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