You recently visited a store to repair your computer but they couldn't fix it , write a letter to the store manager and say,- what was the problem with your computer?- What happened in the store?- What do you want them to do about it?

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You recently visited a store to repair your computer but they couldn't fix it , write a letter to the store manager and say,
- what was the problem with your computer?
- What happened in the store?
- What do you want them to do about it?

Dear Manager,

I'm writing to tell you that last day I visited your store to repair my computer that I bought from your shop and still under guarantee.
Two days ago, I turned it on everything was working properly, suddenly a blue screen appeared and kept restarting, that’s why I brought it back to your store.

I clarified the problem to one of your employees, after checking from his side, the issue appeared again and nothing he can do. I left the laptop at your shop for diagnosing the matter.
I would like to know if the issue repaired. If the pc needs a fresh windows installation, I prefer to exchange to a new desktop since it still within the warranty.
Thanks for taking these notes into consideration and expecting a feedback from your side as soon as possible.

Sincerely Yours,

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
Dear Manager, Im writing to tell you that last day I vis...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t your shop for diagnosing the matter. I would like to know if the issue repaire...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, still

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 13.1623246493 8% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 41.998997996 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 670.0 1615.20841683 41% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 141.0 315.596192385 45% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75177304965 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.44591672665 4.20363070211 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67579921022 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 176.041082164 56% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.702127659574 0.561755894193 125% => OK
syllable_count: 197.1 506.74238477 39% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9668640201 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7142857143 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1428571429 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.85714285714 7.06120827912 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212543382424 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690847044258 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829625994127 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105593846566 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0955950180852 0.056905535591 168% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 78.4519038076 41% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 22.4719101124 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 9
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