You saw an advert asking for volunteers to run a charity event:
1. Explain why you are interested in helping
2. give details suitable past experience
3. suggest ways you might help with the event
Dear Sir/ Madam,
I am writing to you regarding an announcement I saw it yesterday in a newspaper, and I would like to participate in this charity campaign.
Firstly, I want to introduce myself. I am Ahmed Karem. I am 38 years old, and I am working as a production manager at a steel factory. When I read the Advertise asking for people to work as volunteers, I was happy; I like such this work, and I believe it is an important job.
Secondly, I have a good experience in work as a volunteer; I work 2 years on an awareness campaign in my Hometown, and I have the knowledge which makes me able to work at any charity events.
Finally, because I am a good speaker, I can make meetings to explain our vision and mission; Moreover, I can deal with a Photoshop application, so I can make a design for this event. In addition, I can work in Word and Excel applications.
I look forward to hearing from you; should you require any further information, you will call me. You can contact me via WhatsApp, and here it is my contact number: 5577689. Thank you in advance.
Faithfully,
Ahmed
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2020-08-23 | ahmed ahmed | 56 | view |
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing to you regarding an announc...
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...manager at a steel factory. When I read the Advertise asking for people to work as volunteers...
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..., and I believe it is an important job. Secondly, I have a good experience in wo...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...an work in Word and Excel applications. I look forward to hearing from you; shou...
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Suggestion:
...9. Thank you in advance. Faithfully, Ahmed
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, look, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 901.0 1615.20841683 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 201.0 315.596192385 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48258706468 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 4.20363070211 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88926680607 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 176.041082164 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587064676617 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 280.8 506.74238477 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.3106842239 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.9090909091 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2727272727 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72727272727 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190737432265 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632976548949 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675069769633 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101964643332 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.066842488839 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.0946893788 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 12.4159519038 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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