A glance at the life in general brings a light question that has several times provoked discussions, that is whether success is all about being rich or is there anything else which could be called success. Some people contend that success is in the form of money, which is an essential these days. However, I would like to say there are other things which come under success as well. For example to be best in studies is success and serving humanity could be success! I will try to shed some light on this point of view through ample examples and conspicuous reasons.
The exquisite point to be mentioned firstly is that, to excel in studies is a huge success in itself. What happen is that education not only groom us in every possible way but also make us understand the true realities of life. Furthermore, education give us the power to analyse everything, giving us analytical power, which is extremely crucial. My personal experience will provide some good demonstration. When i was in A level kids who were rich and too cool to study were real famous, but after all those years school only recalls and invite those students who worked hard and made their way to universities. Now they are the new famous! No body even remember the names of all those popular kids. So this shows that, all term success in the form and respect came for students who worked really hard. The success with money did not last long.
Another point to be mentioned here is success could be in the form of social work, which give people a sense of accomplishment. Such people spend there lives helping the destitute, feeding the poor and providing free education to those who are undeserved. Hence bringing a profound impact in their lives. Philanthropist success comes in the form of satisfaction. They feel worthwhile, after all what could be better than to serve the mankind. For such people the concept of success is completely different, they do not have the usual materialistic approach to life. Edhi sahab, the famous philanthropist had a house of one room, but used to run many orphanages, hospitals.
Cutting the long story short, success is a perspective. For some making a lot of money is success, for others education is, for some self less souls its serving humanity. It is up to us what we consider success. Let us hope we all find our success!
- Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, where does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, where does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- TOEFL essay: Do you agree or disagree with following statement? It is better to be a member of a group than to be the leader of a group. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details. 76
- Are books more important than experience? 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 277, Rule ID: ESSENTIAL_ESSENTIALLY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'essentially'?
Suggestion: essentially
...ss is in the form of money, which is an essential these days. However, i would like to sa...
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Line 1, column 308, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ch is an essential these days. However, i would like to say there are other thing...
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Line 2, column 416, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...l provide some good demonstration. When i was in A level kids who were rich and t...
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Line 2, column 645, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'Nobody'?
Suggestion: Nobody
...versities. Now they are the new famous! No body even remember the names of all those po...
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Line 3, column 257, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... education to those who are undeserved. Hence bringing a profound impact in their liv...
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Line 4, column 124, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun souls is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... for others education is, for some self less souls its serving humanity. It is up to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, well, while, after all, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73006134969 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6030277943 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60736196319 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4021324374 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.1578947368 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1578947368 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15789473684 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0526545837081 0.236089414692 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0154639952434 0.076458572812 20% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0231393544614 0.0737576698707 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0329690694705 0.150856017488 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0109613420548 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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