4.Television advertising directed toward young children should not be allowed.
In my opinion, age of young children who have two to five years old is a very important part of their life. It is the best time to learn, do and form base of our own self, charectristics and features. Television advertising affect young children and permission to do this need to think about advantages and disadvantages of it. Actually, although there are many good reasons why some people let television advertising direct toward the young children, I support the idea that we shouldn’t permit this to the children because it leads to happen probably events in their future. Two personal experiences convince me that avoiding children from tv advertising provides a better life style and I want to discuss them.
In the first place, one of the most important advantage to avoid children is the chance to be causious and take care of perils. In these ages, children memic from every thing in around them and do according to what they see or hear. In tv advertising there are a lot of dangress and action works that children may do them. For instance, when I was a child and had 4 years old, I saw an advertising in tv. It showed a woman that works with a nife and fastly cut the fruits. She made a very beautiful full plates of bananas, lemons, apples, orranges and etc. They were very nice. It attracted me to do this work. Then I brought all fruits which we had in our refrigerator and took the nife that was very sharp and I start to cut them as quickly as I can. After a while I hurt my self and cut through my finger. It was very terrible to me to make this bad experience and I never forgot that. If my mother kept me from watching tv, maybe I never fear from nife. I dread it yet. As you can see, it is essential to avoid children from tv advertising.
Second, a huge profit is option of learning faults and wrong works in this situation. Young children are learning more in this level of their life. they can learn wrong ways from tv advertising that is shown to them and it isn’t appropriate with their age. For example, when I was five, I saw a struggle between 2 brothers that wanted to win a car. This advertising was about hyunda car. In end of advertising, they faced together and before settling the conflict they used the words that was very ugly. That words were new for me and I didn’t know that means. So when I was in a party with my familly I said that words and every one saw me wonderly. It was wondering to me why they saw me. Then my mother said me that it was wrong to tell them front of another person. This experience thought me that it’s not true to say every thing I learn from tv.
In sum, both of manner to allow to the work or not is fine, but I think that it isn’t neccessary to let them from this age to be directed to tv advertising. Not only will we take care of them from dangers but also we can cause they don’t learn about things that isn’t fit to their age. I recommend every parrent should be awar to be causious about this subject to keep children from every bad situation.
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Sentence: In my opinion, age of young children who have two to five years old is a very important part of their life.
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to learn, do and form base of our own self,
to learn, do and form the base of ourselves,
Sentence: Actually, although there are many good reasons why some people let television advertising direct toward the young children, I support the idea that we shouldn't permit this to the children because it leads to happen probably events in their future.
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a lot of dangress and action works
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Sentence: In sum, both of manner to allow to the work or not is fine, but I think that it isn't neccessary to let them from this age to be directed to tv advertising.
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but also we can cause they don't learn about things that isn't fit to their age.
but also we can cause them not to learn about things that are n't fit to their age.
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Sentence: In the first place, one of the most important advantage to avoid children is the chance to be causious and take care of perils.
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Sentence: In tv advertising there are a lot of dangress and action works that children may do them.
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Sentence: She made a very beautiful full plates of bananas, lemons, apples, orranges and etc. They were very nice.
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Sentence: Then I brought all fruits which we had in our refrigerator and took the nife that was very sharp and I start to cut them as quickly as I can.
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Sentence: If my mother kept me from watching tv, maybe I never fear from nife.
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Sentence: So when I was in a party with my familly I said that words and every one saw me wonderly.
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Sentence: In sum, both of manner to allow to the work or not is fine, but I think that it isn't neccessary to let them from this age to be directed to tv advertising.
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Sentence: I recommend every parrent should be awar to be causious about this subject to keep children from every bad situation.
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