A/D: One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Nowadays, the word – parenting - has got completely different meaning, indeed it means the art of child training which requires wide range of abilities and knowledge. Some parents think that part-time job has a variety of advantages for their children's future. Contrary to this popular belief, there are those who argue that children should not work since their main duty is studying their lesson to be prepared for high educational degrees.
First and foremost, work experience becomes one of the initial requirements for lots of schools. Therefore having the academic knowledge and great grades cannot guarantee the entrance to the good universities or colleges, because there is some other factors which have to be considered by an admission committee. Therefore, children should develop some practical abilities in themselves in order to become successful in the future. Besides, the students who just allocate their time to study, unfortunately they force to deal with the lack of social skills which prevents them from really growing up. Undoubtedly, nobody can overlook the role of establishing good relationship in the path of success for adults. As a result, the children who do not care about this issue are sentenced to suffer a lot of difficulties.
Another important issue which should have taken into consideration is that work in a part time job helps children to looking for their interests. As a result, they have an opportunity to follow the major which they are curious about it. Consequently, by spending some hours in a day children can make a huge difference in their lives. Moreover, when children work, they learn so many things that assist them to become more responsible and independent. For instance, they learn how to obey specific rules or orders even if they have opposite view. Also, they have to start they work at a specific time. It also has positive consequences for their parents because when teenagers work and have their own income, they find out the value of money, thereby using it correctly which is very important issue in a family. These are the precious lessons that children can learn thanks to working when they are teenagers.
On the basis of the points mentioned above, I am convinced that working as a part-time brings a lot of opportunities for teenagers both for their educational improvements and future professional careers. So, parents should try their best to push their dears to work when they are at a lower ages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 99, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...itial requirements for lots of schools. Therefore having the academic knowledge and great...
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Line 2, column 520, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'dealing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: dealing
...time to study, unfortunately they force to deal with the lack of social skills which pr...
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Line 3, column 87, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...en into consideration is that work in a part time job helps children to looking for their...
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Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...d above, I am convinced that working as a part-time brings a lot of opportunities for teena...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'consequently', 'first', 'if', 'look', 'moreover', 'really', 'so', 'therefore', 'for instance', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.218262806236 0.229887763892 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.167037861915 0.158761421928 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0824053452116 0.0866891130778 95% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0512249443207 0.046263068375 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0668151447661 0.0685040099705 98% => OK
Prepositions: 0.115812917595 0.118717715034 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0378619153675 0.0351676179071 108% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75812827782 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0356347438753 0.0309702414327 115% => OK
Particles: 0.00445434298441 0.00188951952338 236% => OK
Determiners: 0.0935412026726 0.0887237588012 105% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0178173719376 0.0209618222197 85% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0334075723831 0.0139019557991 240% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2480.0 2387.08602151 104% => OK
No of words: 409.0 408.028673835 100% => OK
Chars per words: 6.06356968215 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.342298288509 0.338922669872 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.273838630807 0.251872472559 109% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.205378973105 0.174417080927 118% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.134474327628 0.112833075102 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75812827782 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567237163814 0.524397521467 108% => OK
Word variations: 66.7468743122 59.2087087015 113% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.5263157895 20.5533526081 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2190377008 48.84282405 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.526315789 120.699889404 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5263157895 20.5533526081 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.631578947368 0.644075263715 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 48.9101788702 45.7405998639 107% => OK
Elegance: 1.3046875 1.45489161554 90% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395999728302 0.300154397459 132% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0915413725562 0.103427244359 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0626254160777 0.0752933317313 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.485738707923 0.497263757937 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0858967704509 0.151897553556 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146149434709 0.114077575197 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057933267389 0.0781384742642 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.346209161706 0.336927656856 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0100892278126 0.067059652881 15% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284966477499 0.210909579961 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0155383341884 0.0618886996521 25% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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