Advacement of technology now days has uttily influence on all aspect of our life, whether the technology has decrease kids creation than in the past or not can be weighted in many aspects. in perspective, I do not concur with this statement that technology ruins the creative ability of young children.
Admittedly, some people believe that techology has bad effect on kids mental growing, especialy when they used in incorrect way,for example, kids that play a video games long time and neglect their academic achievenments, but with suitble restriction and perfect rules kids can get a neumerous benefits from technology, in this essay I will elaborate on a couple of reasons to explain my point of view.
First, and foremost, technilogy is very beneficial to children, this is mainly due to the fact that by doing that young kids unable them to lean and earn a lot of knowelege and information that improve their experiences and skills, for example, my son usualy play computer game when he has brake time, these video game learn him a lot of english vocubiliries especialy our home language is arabic, therefore when we moved to USA he did not face any difficulity in english languge, consequently, technology has a positive effect on our kids intelligent.
Second, due to the improvement in technology, there are many advance device like computer, I pad and smart phone that kids can use to acces many websites like google and U tube and utilize them for teaching purpose to help them to verify and understand their subjects during doing their assenments and projects, as a peice of evidence, when I was in the high school, I went to library to search for books and reference to do my dueties, but, right now my daughter can accesses google website to get any information that she wants, since we can figure out the importance of technology in our kids life.
To sum up, the statement is not as persuasive as it stands, based on my exposition mentioned above, due to many technical tools that are used, technology can improve creativeness of kids rather than made them less creative.
Advacement of technology now days has uttily influence on all aspect of our life, whether the technology has decrease kids creation than in the past or not can be weighted in many aspects. in perspective, I do not concur with this statement that technology ruins the creative ability of young children.
Admittedly, some people believe that techology has bad effect on kids mental growing, especialy when they used in incorrect way,for example, kids that play a video games long time and neglect their academic acheivnments, but with suitble restriction and perfect rules kids can get a neumerous benefits from technology, in this essay I will elaborate on a couple of reasons to explain my point of view.
First, and foremost, technlogy is very beneficial to children, this is mainly due to the fact that by doing that young kids unable them to lean and earn a lot of knowelege and informations that improve their experiences and skills, for example, my son usualy play computer game when he has brake time, these video game learn him a lot of english vocubiliries especialy our home language is arabic, therefore when we moved to USA he did not face any difficulity in english languge, consequently, technology has a positive effect on our kids intelligent.
Second, due to the improvement in technology, there are many advance device like computer, I pad and smart phone that kids can use to acces many websites like google and U tube and utilize them for teaching purpose to help them to verify and understand their subjects during doing their assenments and projects, as a peice of evidence, when I was in the high school, I went to library to search for books and reference to do my dueties, but, right now my daughter can accesses google website to get any information that she wants, since we can figure out the importance of technology in our kids life.
To sum up, the statement is not as persuasive as it stands, based on my exposition mentioned above, due to many technical tools that are used, technology can improve creativeness of kids rather than made them less creative.
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but, consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85994397759 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76055500794 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579831932773 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.6003584229 29% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 59.0 20.1344086022 293% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 184.572253242 48.9658058833 377% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 289.166666667 100.406767564 288% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 59.5 20.6045352989 289% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.5 5.45110844103 229% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393627826979 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.251589779589 0.076458572812 329% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.249018161241 0.0737576698707 338% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255089714588 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.277345552441 0.0645574589148 430% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.2 11.7677419355 265% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 11.59 58.1214874552 20% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.10430107527 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.3 10.1575268817 259% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.8 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.72 8.01818996416 134% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 25.6 10.0537634409 255% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 26.0 10.247311828 254% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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