Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone have changed the way nations intercat with each other in a global society. Choose another technological innovation that you think is important. Give specific reasons for your choice.
The internet is an important innovation that change people's life different aspects. Although Internet has bad effect on people, this situation doens't change that Internet is beginning of the new age. I will explain two important reason why Internet is a important technological innovation.
Firstly, The Internet is a independent platform that everbody share own thoughts and personal experiences on it. This mean lots of information but anytime it will not have to beneficial information. However if people know that how to use those information at the time it transform very beneficial platform. For example, second year in my university I have a comprehensive project. I needed some help to implement that project. After most of reasearch on the Internet I found the documents that I need but it wasn't easy beacuse my first time in reasearch and I didn't know that where I find that necessary information. Now I use Internet quite effectively and it is easy to find information. That's why Internet is one of big technological innovation.
Secondly the fact that, Internet made shopping easy. In the past, finding the required thing is hard but now with Internet It is very easy and you have lots of choices and different prices. For example, two months ago I needed a computer component. Once I didn't confidence online shopping but I didn't find that component in my city. I have to order that component on the internet. at the same time I had a discount for this shopping. I was very advantage that shopping. That's why Internet is important innovation.
In conclusion, sharing and storing information and shopping is important thing in people's life. Those make Internet important innovation. In my opinion, people should learn how to use Internet to use information and shopping online.
- TPO45 - integrated writing task 3
- Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone have changed the way nations intercat with each other in a global society. Choose another technological innovation that you think is important. Give specific reasons for your 3
- Integrated 45 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? With the help of technology, students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 61
- Young people enjoy life more than older people do. Do you agree or disagree? 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...innovation. Firstly, The Internet is a independent platform that everbody shar...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ill not have to beneficial information. However if people know that how to use those in...
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Line 3, column 239, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'those informations'?
Suggestion: this information; those informations
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Message: Did you mean 'transforms'?
Suggestion: transforms
...to use those information at the time it transform very beneficial platform. For example, ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 296.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08108108108 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97720061817 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47972972973 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 478.8 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9401476747 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.3636363636 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.4545454545 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.40909090909 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0633346124977 0.236089414692 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0223654992913 0.076458572812 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0271481308931 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0426192241502 0.150856017488 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279937328106 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.59 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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