Agree or disagree?
extended family is less important now than it was in the past
The family is an undeniable part of human's life through time. Nowadays, with the development of technology, some people do not have any free time to spend with their family. They believe that the importance of family decreased compare to the past. In my perspective, part of the family in our life is increasing and still is significant.
The first reason to point is that the advancement of technology causes many economic problems for families. In the present time because of the financial problem for the families, they have to devote most of their time working to provide comfortable facilities for their children. Therefore, they do not have much time to spend with their children which can bad effect on them since they need attention. They usually fill their absence with putting their children with their grandparents. By this way grandparents taking care of them and to not let them to feel alone. For example, my friend’s parent have to work in two place because of their financial problem. So, they put their friend with their grandparent and aunts to taking care of them and check his study grade. They also work with him to study and if he has a weakness in specific subjects, they aid him to understand it.
The second reason worth mentioning is that, parents need someone to guide them when they have problem since they do not have plenty of life experience. When they face a problem they go to their families to ask them about it. It is a plausible chance that their families had a situation like their when they were younger. Therefore, they can compensate for their lack of experience with consulting with their families and they give them rational solution for their problem. Moreover, families are a great environment to feel relaxation and being loved for human. Since many people’s mind are very busy in the present they, extended family can play a prominent and crucial role in their life. Therefore by spending just a little time with them they can release all their tension and negative thoughts. For example, a student who study for entrance exam of university is under a lot of pressure and by hanging out with his cousins and they make his nervous to fade away.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned reason, Family still has a vital effects on human’s lives and their role in the life of all people are significant.
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- In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. 70
- In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. 60
- extended family is less important now than it was in the past 70
- TPO 31 83
- It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 153, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... do not have plenty of life experience. When they face a problem they go to their fa...
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Line 5, column 697, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ominent and crucial role in their life. Therefore by spending just a little time with the...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82195121951 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61859115388 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492682926829 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.4035994096 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1428571429 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5238095238 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2380952381 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0559601209167 0.236089414692 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0299085297902 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501255277278 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0541516728177 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456782517658 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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