Because the use of technology such as computers in classrooms for young students has led to many improvements in learning, some people believe that there should be no limits on the number of hours that young students spend using technology during school day. Others believe that too much time spent using technology during school day is harmful and that their use of technology should therefore be limited to one hour or less daily. Which view do you support and why?
Technology like computers is involved in our world from sorted trash to satellite control, making our life easy, convenient and efficient. In contemporary schools, modern products appear in classrooms as an important tool and more students use these inventions to obtain advanced knowledge. Therefore, some people believe that there should be no limits on the number of hours that young people spend using technology. Others hold the view that there should be some restrictions. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the latter point.
Firstly, too much time spent on using high-tech creations would harm children’s health. If kids stare at a screen for a long time and keep one motion constant, their eyesight will suffer greatly and their bodies will be deformed. For example, according to a recent survey, many young people have very poor eyesight and need glasses to see a blackboard clearly. The reason is that most children are exposed to technological products at a very young age so that their eyes are badly hurt and impossible to recover from later. As a result, there should be some limitations on the time that kids spend in school. Young generations should attend more outdoor activities such as basketball games or going around an exhibition. Therefore, adults should require children to use scientific inventions during some specific hours a day. This is conducive to their healthy growth.
In addition, it is difficult to ensure that a child does not get distracted after prolonged exposure to a calculating machine. There are a lot of interesting things in them, like all kinds of movies and videos. Children are easily attracted to such amusing content because they have little self-control. For instance, when I use the computer to study, I may be pretty focused at the beginning, and then I am drawn to lots of funny programs, so that my work efficiency is drastically declining. It is hard for me to not be influenced by those programs, let alone young students. Besides, there is some harmful information on the Internet like drugs and violence. If young people are accidentally exposed to these matters, it is tough to guarantee that their mind and body are not infected. Hence, kids should be required to use technology at certain times during school.
Finally, although some parents may think that younger generations should learn how to use high-tech creations as early as possible since technology has played an indispensable role now and in the future and those practical skills could bring them lots of improvements in their studies, I believe that there should be some requirements for the number of daily use hours. Besides using computers for a long time, children should also take part in more scientific and technological activities and exchange ideas with their classmates. There are some important things that modern innovations can not give them.
To sum up, from what has been discussed above, I hold the view that there should be confinement on the number of hours that young students spend using technology during school day since too much time immersed in contemporary machines would damage their body as well as mental health, their study could also be distracted.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2684.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 530.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0641509434 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79809637944 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75979371949 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524528301887 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 817.2 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.8139715772 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.36 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.454511494383 0.236089414692 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109149079796 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102376413619 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261293631212 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044307176127 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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