Irrefutably in the last few decades, with the advancement of science and technology, technology developments have made drastic changes in the education system. On that ground, with the constant immersion of technology in everyones’ lives, there are very serious concerns that have arisen about how this technology will impact childhood development. In this regard, some people contend that children should not be restricted in utilizing technological benefits. On the other side, there is a group of people who think that .. Certainly, from my vantage point, the former view contains more weight. For the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my stance.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that the technology might hamper the learning abilities of children which mitigate their academic performance level. To be more specific, children at a young age are not mature enough, and thereby, easily get addicted to the use of technology. In fact, children might get distracted while studying for academic subjects on computers, and they either start using social media such as Facebook and Instagram or playing video games for constant long hours. To shed more light on this, my brother’s life is a compelling example of what has been elaborated above. When he was in elementary school, my parents allowed him to use the laptop for his study purpose. Initially, he was well focused on his studies, however, gradually, he became addicted to playing videos games on the laptop for many hours and not focusing on his academic course which reduced his final grade in the exam. Fortunately, my parents made him understand his mistake and restricted his daily hours of using a laptop. Ultimately, it is judicious to say that children should not be permitted to use technology for longer hours.
Another noteworthy reason is that admittedly, technology contributes some benefits to the development of childrens’ careers, while the negative consequences are overweighed the positive ones. Actually, too much dependency on technology might affect the mental as well as physical growth of young pupils and it might get intense over a period of time. Chiefly, when children spend long hours on computers and mobile phones, their eyesight gets affected, and they get eyeglasses at an early age of their lives. Not only this but also childrens’ thinking power and ability to generate new ideas might get hampered over time since they can find everything over the internet with just one click, and slowly, it leads to depression. To exemplify, based on statistical data collected from research at the University of California shows that 75% of school-going students who used to spend more than two hours every day on computers suffered from mental depression last year. On top of that, most of them had started eyesight issues with growing age in last many years. Therefore, it is reasonable to make a point that restricting the usage of technology is beneficial for children.
To recapitulate, from contemplating all remarks. in spite of the fact that some may not agree with my viewpoint, I strongly believe that it is a wise idea to restrict the usage of technology for the young generation. This is because technological dependency can haphazardly affect their academic performance, and it can damage their overall health.
- At one high school more of the students than ever before have been caught cheating on their homework assignments For example many of the students have asked other students to provide them with answers for assignment The school is considering making a 90
- Nowadays many high schools and universities require students to work on projects in groups and all members of the group receive the same grade mark on the project Do you agree or disagree that giving every member of a group the same grade is a good way to 90
- Which one of the following values is the most important to share with a young child 5 10 years old 1 Being helpful 2 Being honest 3 Being well organized 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Parents today are more involved in their children s education than parents were in the past 73
- TPO 11 Integrated Writing Task 70
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, in fact, such as, as well as, in spite of, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2848.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 544.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23529411765 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82947280553 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87769020526 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 299.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549632352941 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 890.1 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6900316792 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.666666667 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45833333333 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267053041593 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701387630704 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537304457123 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15303773986 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214162622583 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 86.8835125448 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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