Nowadays, technological advancements make a plethora of changes in people's lives, so that the way that they live is quite different form the past. There is a controversy between people that whether these changes make more satisfactory and happiness in their lives or not. A popular belief in this regard is that they are much happier with their lives than people were in the past, whereas, the other group of people have a complete opposite view about this idea. Personally, I agree with the former. In the ensuing lines, I will attempt to support this idea through 2 reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that technological advancements, like the internet, make people to be more satisfied with their lives. Internet enables people to be aware of what is going on around the globe. In the past, people were living in a remote area. If there was an event happening in the world, they had to wait for a long time in order to be informed. Also, if people wanted to be informed regarding their relatives, they had to write a letter, which took a several days to get a response. That being said, by advancing in technology, like the internet, people's lives has changed completely. Today, they are not live in a remote area anymore. They can be informed regarding the events happening around the world immediately. Besides, if they want to make a communication with their relatives in another country, they can write a letter to them and send it via email and get its response immediately. Thus, today, people are much happier and more satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
The second reason which deserves some words here is that medical advancements make people to live much longer than the past. Today, people can cure their illnesses much easier. In the past, the medical science was not very advanced. Many sicknesses were not identified and there was a possibility that people died due to a simple cold. That being said, thanks to the advancements in technology, the medical science is vert advanced. The cause of many sicknesses are identified today and people can prevent themselves from these illnesses. If they get sick, there are a considerable number of pills and vaccins they can use. Also, doctors are now more capable to monitor the cause of many sicknesses by using high-tech devices, and as a result, people are now more satisfied regarding their lives.
To put it all in a nutshell, nowadays, thanks to the technological advancements, people are much happier with their lives than the past owing to the fact that unlike the past, they can be more in contact with each other by using the internet. Also, today, people can cure a wide range of sicknesses due to advancements in medicine science and as a result, they can live much longer than the past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 491, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'day'?
Suggestion: day
...to write a letter, which took a several days to get a response. That being said, by ...
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Line 4, column 255, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ther by using the internet. Also, today, people can cure a wide range of sickness...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, regarding, second, so, thus, whereas, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2320.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79338842975 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62646461462 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.425619834711 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.9 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.512406526 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.36 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363643544931 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122300674183 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0999986692058 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254936515115 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482058543758 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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