In college and university Sports and social activities are important as classes and libraries and should receive the same amount of financial support.
Some people think that classes and libraries are the most beneficial sources for student in the college. People believes that class rooms is the only pace students get the information form. Others think that libraries should get the large amount of financial support. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that sports and social activities are equal in value with classes and libraries and should receive the same exact amount of financial support. The basis of my opinion is social and educational.
From a social perspective if the university supports the sports and social activities with enough amount of money, that will benefit the students. For example, if there are a variety of sports in the college, the will allow the students to communicate and increase their social net work. If the university provides the social activities with sufficient amount of money, there will be different activities provided to the students. Such as, soccer, basket ball, swimming , all this kinds of sports are the best way students could meet and practice sport in the mean time. While students are practicing, they can talk and chat. Students will have the opportunity to meet other students from the same year and they can get to study together. Students can share information with other older students. Therefore supporting the social activities with money will help students to be more social active and communicate freely.
Medically, playing sport is the best way to have a better health. They said that the good mind is in the good body. By supporting the social activities and sports with money, students will have the chance to be in a good shape and better health. For example, if the university have variety of sports like swimming classes or soccer tranning, that will benefit the students to practice every day. On the other hand, if the students will only focus on the study and ignore the sport, the will danger them. Students will be lazy and less active. If students have too much free time and if they do not use this time in a proper way, that will have a serious consequences on the students. For example, students may go to night clubs, or smoke cigarettes and that endanger their health. That is why I think that supporting the sports and social activities with enough amount of money will benefit the students.
In conclusion, for the reason I mentioned above I think it is better to support the social activities and sports financially. Social activities and sports are the best way through which students can communicate and increase their social network. Moreover, sports provide the chance for many students to be in a good health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2298.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98481561822 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5759030844 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.405639913232 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.3669300086 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9130434783 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0434782609 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52173913043 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32303825993 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116424470865 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137993538761 0.0737576698707 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243052347918 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0992318773762 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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