In the this competetive market, companeis tries their best to make their employees work better, and even they invest large amount of money on this. While some companies spend money to enhance their technology equiments, others allocate money on redesigning work space and make it more comfortale. Pesonally speaking, I belive the best way to improve work efficiency is to provide the best technology equipment for the empolyees. There are some reasons supporting my idea, two of which will be explore in this essay.
First and foremost, the technology develops rapidly. Every year, some new features add to computers and printers that make them more effecient and helpful. Researches show that the companies which have the most recent version of these equipment can work better in different situations. As an example, I worked in a news office some years ago. In that time, there was a big election in my country. The work force was too much and all of us were working days and nights. Despite all the efforts, we could not cover all the news like our rival news centers did. It was all because our computers were older than their's and it took long time to process the information for us.
Moreover, new equipment is always faster than the older generation. Therefore, by providing these equipments for the employees, the company help them save time during their work time. The older version of computers are not only slower than the new ones, but also they are more possible to be out of work. So, it make much trouble for the workers. If the employees have the recent technology, they can do their job as fast as possible and enjoy the rest of their day. besides that, If they need to discuss some issues, they can use some restaurants near their office. A survey in Tehran University showed that when some equipment broke during work time for several time, the employees are not willing to fix it all. So, it takes long time restore the proper situation. During that time, the worker have nothing to do. the researchers propose that it is best to prevent happening these cicumstances by renewing techonlogy equipment every two or three years.
In conclusion, I believe although there are lots of ways to make the job office a better place, the most important one is to provide the best equipment for the employees. In this way, they will be more willing to work and the quality will excel the rival companies.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 4, Rule ID: DT_DT[2]
Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
In the this competetive market, companeis tries the...
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Line 2, column 229, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this equipment' or 'these equipments'?
Suggestion: this equipment; these equipments
...s which have the most recent version of these equipment can work better in different situations...
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Line 3, column 312, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...more possible to be out of work. So, it make much trouble for the workers. If the em...
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Line 3, column 467, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Besides
...ssible and enjoy the rest of their day. besides that, If they need to discuss some issu...
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Line 3, column 656, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'several times'.
Suggestion: several times
...me equipment broke during work time for several time, the employees are not willing to fix i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78468899522 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47041050162 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511961722488 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2020571414 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.3333333333 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4166666667 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.45833333333 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293717697416 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730179661552 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655401191801 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183110744001 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639041044218 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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