Describe an object that is very special in your life Explain why this object is important to you Include details and examples in your explanation

A painting that i wake up to everyday is close to my heart. A painting that sculpts me. My mother gifted me this spectacular painting when i lost in a competition when i was 6 years old, which was totally unexpected and uncommon. The painting is of a melting candle that symbolizes a woman , the painting expresses the strength of a woman a goddess that provides light in the darkness even when she knew she would melt soon. every time I see that graciously sitting flame on top of the candle it motivates me to show love even to my enemies that show hate which makes me stronger day by day.

This is very special to me because this was gifted by my mom who is the real woman in that painting, she is an incredibly strong woman who has faced through a lot yet had a smile held in her face like the melting candle that poured out the waxes in different colors that looked magical but only the candle knew that she was reaching the end soon.

Everyday when i see the painting if boosts my courage, strength and confidence. Every single time I lose in life I come back to see this painting which tells me that failure is just a part of life, keep moving. If there is something in life that i cherish it is the day i lost in the competition because if I would' nt have lost I would have missed that painting.

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Average: 8 (17 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 52.1666666667 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1061.0 1977.66487455 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 250.0 407.700716846 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.244 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37701409938 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 212.727598566 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 331.2 618.680645161 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.6736372387 48.9658058833 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.888888889 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7777777778 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 5.45110844103 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0583668463805 0.236089414692 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0220720234176 0.076458572812 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03020258444 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0480198999774 0.150856017488 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279327710993 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.45 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.61 10.9000537634 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 86.8835125448 40% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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