Do you agree or did agree with following statement successful job needs good relations with people more than studying hard?
one of the most important aspects of our life is work that we spent most of our times on our works. Generically speaking works are what keep us having families, social statutes, foods, and even healthy lives because by works we have enough resources for life. Personally, i believe that in order to have successful job one has to study much harder than having a talent to interact with other people. I feel this way for two reasons, which i will explain in the following essay.
First of all, in today's society one's knowledge and acquired skill are guarantee to succeed in work. In school, we learn the most important knowledges of modern world and how to live in it on our own. On the other hand, having poor skill in one's own career while having great communication ability can't be helpful. my own experience is a compelling example of this. Ever since my elementary school to my college years, i have always been shy and introverted student that i hardly interacted with my classmates. Teachers and other adults were always telling me that how it would be harmful for your future and etc. but i was always one of the best students in all of my school years due to my introverted nature but curious mind of interested in every subjects. because of this, i had good marks in my diploma that once i graduated my college, i got employed really fast compared to my classmates who had greater social interactions. Now i'm working as a chief engineer in a big company. one of the beautiful thing about engineering is i'm not required to be talkative, but to have the skill.
Secondly, one of the beautiful thing about the life of working world is one can be self employed. In ordinary working places and working in teams, you must have good relations with your teammates in order to get your jobs done, but in self employment case you must do your work well and that's most necessity thing you should do even though you must treat customers with good manner. For instance, my parents are self employed that they run market as family business. Both of my parents learned their marketing skill from business school that they decided it is better for them to have private bussiness where they can be free as much as they want. All they have to do is keep varieties of good, be clean, and satisfy customers' needs. my parents have so much free schedules that they can close the market and take rest whenever they want. they don't need to have coworkers and urgency of fit to with teammates. As a result, they look much younger and stress free compared to people of the same age.
In conclusion, i strongly believe that studying hard and doing own business are much more useful than having good relation with my other people. this is because learned skills in schools are vital to jobs and owning private business can elimate depedency on other people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, well, while, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2337.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60039370079 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42831377573 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507874015748 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7379614765 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.375 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151429380304 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0425727091407 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743688066138 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111339461613 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637179148613 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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