Together with the improvements in society, it seems rather ironic that subjects rather than science and mathematics should be taught in schools. Thus, the question has been raised as to whether it is compulsory for students to learn art and music in secondary schools or not. While it is undeniable that both arguments have their own merit to boast, if forced to choose one over another, my resolute standpoint is definitely in line with the students not necessary to study for art and music which I will explain the reasons in the following essay.
To begin with, teenagers should not learn about art and music in middle school because it is useless. To be specific, art and music have nothing to do with our life as the majority of the job today is all about technology and the modern world. Should students not study for art and music, they can focus more on the fundamental courses such as mathematics and science, which gives them more possibilities to achieve higher grades. I assume that a personal example can shed light on this notion. During my high school year in Malaysia which was about 3 years ago, I had to study art and music that I did not want to do which placed a huge burden on my shoulder during the revision week. Also, when I went to apply for the universities, most of the places specifically look for science and mathematic results. It is clear with this example that art and music are not necessary for all of the students to take.
Moreover, another reason that all students are not required to study art and music is that it is a waste of money for some families. If those courses are to be optional for students to study, then the family of that son and daughter can save money and use it for the future later. In fact, a survey conducted by an American secondary school shows that about 80% of the students would not choose to study for arts and music if it is not mandatory. Furthermore, when a reporter questioned a group of students, they claim that they do not need to study those subjects since it has nothing to do about their life. This clearly shows that not all students should take art and music in school.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is not essential for all students to attend art and music class because of, the reasons mentioned above. However, opinions may vary from people to people, but what does not change is that this topic is something that needs to be mentioned.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 181, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ols. Thus, the question has been raised as to whether it is compulsory for students to learn ...
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Line 3, column 876, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...le that art and music are mandatory for all of the students to take. Moreover, another...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, then, thus, while, as to, in conclusion, in fact, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2041.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58651685393 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46599906119 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476404494382 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.2410215236 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.058823529 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1764705882 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35294117647 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356510942339 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127720764101 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736883989292 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221139865319 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579479073656 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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