History has in important role in our nowadays world and can teach us so greatly about the past as well as future of countries and communities. There are lots of lesson about kings and queens and their territories and also connections and conflicts among them and policies governments made about their people. In this regard, there exist two perspectives about including a history course in curriculum of university. On one hand, there is a group who hold the opinion that it is necessary to have a history course in university. Conversely, the other group disagrees. Talking from my own experience, although passing a history course in university is convincing, however, I strongly believe in the latter opinion. In the following sentences I would explicitly express my idea and support it by definite reasons.
To begin with, students, at least in my country, history turned to be exhausting. They have taken several history courses during their education since elementary school to be eligible to follow their education in higher degree. To clarify it, you as an elementary student in third grade need to study about the early people who settled in Iran, namely Persian, to be able to go the upper level. Then in the following years you study about different dynasties and territories and how the kings expand their kingdom. At the end of the high-school you study about the Islamic revolution and how the Islamic republic of Iran established. As you can see, during the education we always need to study about history which turns to be very arduous and tiring through the years and the funny thing is students mostly forgot all the subjects.
Furthermore, there are other different courses which universities must include them as a requirement for all students. Today, life is changing in fast pace and every one need to be aware of new technologies. According’s, some new technologies are emerging that demands people to get familiar with and understand, at least, the basics of them. To put my idea forward, I should emphasize that we need to know more about computers and the Internet. When it comes to me, I vividly remember that during my education in undergraduate degree, my classmates did not know how to use computers and the Internet. Consequently, they were used to come to me either to help them or to solve their problem and sometimes even to do their projects. I recall that they did not know how to use the software product called "Power Point" which was a shame. As a result, having more computer courses for students in university is much more beneficial that history which you can easily forget the details as it has happened to me.
To conclude, history is not only fatiguing but also students need other courses to be included in the requirements of graduation from university. Taking them into account, a history course would not be beneficial for students in university. I personally disagree with the opinion. Better to say, we should study history occasionally based on our interest but not as a course in university.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 154, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun lesson seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of lessons'.
Suggestion: lots of lessons
...of countries and communities. There are lots of lesson about kings and queens and their territ...
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Line 3, column 631, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to coming'.
Suggestion: used to coming
...d the Internet. Consequently, they were used to come to me either to help them or to solve t...
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Line 3, column 807, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...w how to use the software product called apos;Power Point apos; which was a shame...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, conversely, furthermore, however, if, so, then, third, well, at least, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2549.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93036750484 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77593525692 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502901353965 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 821.7 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2285052077 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.96 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.68 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268760347166 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0748391308805 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436277915202 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169870605298 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478831951051 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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