Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Modern society has matured in a variety of ways and the expected behaviors have definitely changed over time. It is no longer feasible to linger on the old ways and expect a relaxed, carefree lifestyle to lead to success in today's fast-paced society. Therefore, I agree with the sentence that young people have to learn how to plan and organize their lives in modern, intricate contemporary life. In the paragraphs below, I will state my reasons for agreeing with that statement.
First, it is undeniable that mistakes now have far-reaching consequences and are not as easily remedied as they were in the past. In past times, one's mistake usually only involved themselves or their relatives. Nowadays one person is connected to a web of colleagues and peers. So, one simple mistake and act of disorganization might hurt the whole group. There is a great example to be made from my uncle's company. He supplies electrical components to resellers in a big city and to my estimate, more than 40 people work under him. One clerk has admitted that he was not fully focused on his task one day because the due time to fill some papers was nearing. So when entering numbers into a sheet, he made a mistake and the result was a huge fiscal fight with the government over revenue taxes. In this case, if the young employee had better discipline and planning abilities, he could have easily prevented this whole drama for himself and the whole company.
Second, modern life is based on being able to deliver precisely what is needed in the shortest amount of time. Obviously, this cannot be achieved by someone that lacks correct planning skills. The whole society runs on the assumption that everyone in their position is fully aware of their responsibilities and is able to deliver them to perfection. Universities offer specialized degrees and employers hire graduates with technical skills, but the missing point is that planning and organizing skills are totally separate from technical ones taught in schools. This is why the young have to teach themselves these skills. For example, no matter how knowledgeable a teacher is, he or she has to have planning skills to run a classroom full of children and be an example to them. Without correct plans, the teacher will not be able to fulfill his or her duties toward the younglings.
In summary, I believe it is of utmost importance for young people, who will one day lead society and be the role model for younger generations after them, to have the ability to organize not only their life and goals but also their professional work. Mistakes simply cost too much in the modern, interconnected lives of people, but, a lot of these mistakes can be prevented with clear plans and organizations. Modern life also expects experts in every position and planning abilities are at the core of these expectations. Life might seem very complex nowadays, but with a little bit of careful planning and self-discipline and taking time to organize expected tasks, one surely can find success and happiness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...s they were in the past. In past times, ones mistake usually only involved themselve...
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Line 7, column 574, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
... seem very complex nowadays, but with a little bit of careful planning and self-discipline...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, as to, for example, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2531.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90503875969 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73428872023 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542635658915 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 808.2 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1981454144 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.458333333 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.125 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23797418509 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062737778728 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659719154569 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15583360445 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0697778620841 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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