Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because today's world is so busy and crowded, we should not expect people to be polite to one another.
Since the advent of human civilization, mutual respect has been intertwined in people’s lives. But since all aspects of societies have been influenced, so has social behaviour. Views differ when it comes to the issue of whether one should expect people to be polite to others in modern society or not. Some people have this opinion that life challenges pave the way for people to be impolite, while others think no one has the right to disrespect anyone by being rude or impolite. Well, I personally concur with the former opinion that people are more rude in the present world because they only care about their work and are too busy to behave in a polite manner.
First of all, nowadays, people care more about themselves and their work. Due to their busy schedules and workloads, people tend to be surly out of stress or anxiety. On the contrary, in the past, people had lots of time because they just had to raise their crops and feed cattle. In other words, they were involved in subsidiary agriculture, and as a result, they needed to cooperate with each other in order to sell or exchange their products and to ask for help increasing crop production. That’s why ancient people were more polite to each other, so as to have good cooperation and relationships.
Second, people working in firms aim to increase the efficiency of their work. They are profit-driven and only focus on how to make their workers work effectively. For this purpose, they need to guide them in a strict manner. Because if they act cool-tempered, no one under their assistance will listen to them or take them seriously. Take my boss, Fred, as an example; he likes to directly point out flaws in my work and is very strict about deadlines for projects. Even though sometimes this makes me frustrated, owing to his impassionate pressure, I am able to identify my true potential and work more efficiently before approaching deadlines.
To conclude, I support the argument that, in the current situation of society, people are prone to distress due to lots of arduous work as well as responsibilities. In order to complete these, people need to be a bit strict and impolite. Therefore, due to these factors, I don’t anticipate a calm and polite attitude from others.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 646, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a polite manner" with adverb for "polite"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...t their work and are too busy to behave in a polite manner. First of all, nowadays, people care m...
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Line 2, column 465, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to increase' or 'increase'.
Suggestion: to increase; increase
...ange their products and to ask for help increasing crop production. That’s why ancient peo...
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Line 2, column 551, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... people were more polite to each other, so as to have good cooperation and relationships...
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Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a strict manner" with adverb for "strict"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...r this purpose, they need to guide them in a strict manner. Because if they act cool-tempered, no ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, as to, as a result, as well as, first of all, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80927835052 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71664644817 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564432989691 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5854304865 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2105263158 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4210526316 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78947368421 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1802872322 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577332669707 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542602948286 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113602436605 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0779688051517 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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