Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Cars(automobiles) have greater effects on society than airplanes do.
I tend to agree that the usage of automobiles would be socially detrimental in comparison with the popularization of airplanes.
Initially, the occurrence of the endless, crawling traffic jams—the most common phenomena in urban areas—is due to an excessive number of vehicles. For example, a month ago, I had a job interview with the finest company anyone could imagine. It could have been the chance of my life. In that morning, I drove out of my house with a frenzy of excitement, speeding down the road at 70 mph. Suddenly, the massive number of cars led to a traffic jam. The snail speed movement just kept getting slower and slower until the entire fleet came to a dead halt. I had thought that traffic flow would be smooth sooner or later. But in fact, the bridge over the lake nearby collapsed and worst still, we couldn't turn around. Consequently, I ended up failing the interview and not getting any second chances. To me, losing my job opportunity was a terrible misfortune due to traffic jams. Not surprisingly, others are bound to have the same experiences as me. Apparently, the application cars exert adverse impacts socially.
Additionally, a substantial number of people get injured or even their priceless lives are divested owing to numerous traffic accidents happening every day. To illustrate, I was once an exchange student in Australia. To save some money, I lived off campus in a community a couple of kilometers away. One night whilst driving back from school, a baby kangaroo leaped into the middle road. Unable to stop, I jerked the wheel and swerved off the road and collided with a tree. I was instantly knocked out cold. Half an hour later, I woke up and realized that I had not killed the creature and not injured badly. It is worth mentioning that such dreadful accident brought me psychological shadow. Undeniably, many have experienced similar events like what I encountered, endangering the lives of animals and humans. Thus, negative social influence produced by using automobiles is worthy of attention.
Finally, pollution produced by automobiles is apparent and serious resulting in abominable environments by way of using cars. For example, 30 years ago, my grandfather once lived in Beijing with fresh air to breathe and clean water to drink. Now, it has all changed. Throughout the growth of the economy, people have bought more and more cars for the sake of convenience and as the time passes by, the air quality gets worst and worst. Beijing used to be a beautiful and livable place to live in but air pollution starts to drag the number of citizens down. My grandfather said that the pollution was so bad that most places he couldn’t see past his own fingertips when it comes to sand storm. Still worse, what made us heartbroken was that he died of lung cancer when he was 83 because of the terrible air. Many people have died of this; therefore, the government should seriously consider this. Evidently, contamination triggered by using automobiles is socially detrimental.
In conclusion, I am convinced that cars affect society negatively in comparison to the application of planes on account of the frequent occurrence of traffic jam, traffic accidents as well as pollution.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Still,
...fingertips when it comes to sand storm. Still worse, what made us heartbroken was tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, consequently, finally, if, second, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, in fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2706.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 542.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9926199262 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86502554015 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 319.0 212.727598566 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588560885609 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 847.8 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0855930332 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4242424242 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0303030303 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.85842293907 363% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0977458028916 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0225546622621 0.076458572812 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0268505691543 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0635886178658 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272733411008 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 86.8835125448 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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