In such a civilized society, in spite of several disagreements, people have in various areas so far as one’s view goes is the importance of family. This is owing to the fact that it is the foundation of each society. With this in mind, a broad range of controversial attitudes might stimulate heated debate as to where is the best place for people to live in order to take care of their families in a high-quality way. Two sides often form in this regard. Those who trust living in urban regions leads people to a better care. While others who think living in rural is a superior choice. I personally consider myself among the former group. Among the many reasons one can give for this point, two conspicuous reasons will be elaborated thorough ensuing lines.
The first and prominent reason which comes to the mind is that the necessities of people in the urban area in more accessible. It goes without saying that with improving technology and arrival of numerous facilities, life has been more convenient compared to the past and these facilities have facilitated people’s lives. Needless to say that some of these facilities such as hospitals are absent in rural regions. In other words, most of the individuals prepare their primitive necessities from the urban areas. For example, if a family need some drugs in a critical situation, it is obvious that those who live in urban areas can access very quickly compared those who live in rural areas.
Another equally important reason which deserves some words here is that the salary obtained by every individual in order to manage his life is higher than one who works in the rural area. It is no secret that most of the people’s lives in rural areas is based on agriculture and thus they have not a huge amount of money to support their families and provide a high-quality atmosphere for them. On the other hand, due to existing of various jobs in urban areas not only people can gain a bulk money but also they are able to save it for their future. According to a recent but reputable research, conducted at the Sharif University of Technology, it was found that the number of families who migrate from the rural areas to urban areas is intensified with a rate of 3 percent annually. This mostly substantiates my point about this issue.
In conclusion, there are numerous reasons which can be persuasive enough to corroborate my view. Having analyzed the reasons above, one can conclude that people can protect their families in urban areas better than those living in rural regions. I highly recommend that governments should pay more attention to rural areas in order to balance the quality of lives in both regions
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... regions leads people to a better care. While others who think living in rural is a s...
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Line 2, column 698, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...compared those who live in rural areas. Another equally important reason which d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, thus, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, in other words, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2230.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80603448276 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63076203565 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512931034483 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2154493992 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.19047619 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0952380952 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377208268766 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106796063851 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0964500072656 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249329308231 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324490053025 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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