Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Sports teach people lessons about life.
In such a civilized society, in spite of several disagreements, people have in various areas so far as one’s view goes, one point that virtually everybody approves upon is the importance of sports. It is mostly owing to the fact that it plays a significant role in people’s lives. With this in mind, a broad range of controversial attitudes might stimulate heated debate as to whether sports can teach some lessons for people regarding their lives or not. I personally believe that sports not only are a main source of entertainments and have a direct relationship with our mental health but also are a good teacher which most of the people can learn from them and use some of the conspicuous aspects of sports in their daily lives. Among many reasons one can give in this regard, two noticeable points will be elaborated in ensuing lines.
The first point that comes to mind is that almost all of the sports are cooperation of several persons in a team. So, the main and important aspect of each sport is its team working which is relate to people lives. Take an example of a football team which plays against its competitor. All of 11 players cooperate, trust each other and share the ball to become the winner of the match. Needless to say that we have this kind of cooperation in our daily lives like in an office with our colleagues and friends during accomplishing a project. Therefore, cooperation is the clearest and prominent aspect of sports.
Another interesting point which deserves some words here is the fact that sports are a remarkable example of decision making in critical situations. Take the same example in the second paragraph, suppose one of the team’s score is higher than the contrary team. The coach of losing team can make some risks in order to substitute some players in attack position or strengthen its defensive line by replacing of some players. Most of the time, he never gives up, wants to challenge without any thinking of bad situations. So, it goes without saying that we have some risks in our lives too. For instance, a boss in a company who wants add some additional fund for a project which is exposed to bankruptcy. Hence, another impressive lesson of sports is that we must be confident and never lose ourselves under bad circumstances.
In conclusion, there are numerous reasons which can persuasive enough that parents and mass media should put more emphasis on sports. All in all, based on given reasons above, sports can give more lessons for people. It is highly suggested that a survey should be conducted to find more information about this issue.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...lose ourselves under bad circumstances. In conclusion, there are numerous reason...
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...find more information about this issue.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, as to, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2169.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68386031172 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8197201893 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.285714286 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124521643053 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357436990735 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451321465672 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0755208633009 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420080675784 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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