Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Educating children is more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking websites. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this progressive world, people have to change the ways of their life to be adapted to this changeable world. To be more specific, especially children are more exposed to this modification than elder people. One of the main effects that this changing influences on children are the method of their education. I am of the opinion that these days it is more problematic for teachers and parents to educate the children. I will elaborate on my reasons in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, with these fancy gadgets and stuff available to children, it is hard to make them concentrate on the school topics. Accordingly, teachers have to use some approaches to motivate students to spend more time on their lessons. Therefore, teachers in the current world have to upgrade themselves with electronic kinds of stuff and use modern methods to teach the students. My cousin’s experience as a teacher is compelling evidence of this. He used video games to attract his students to teach lessons like mathematics. In this approach, he exerts music and animation characters to make school lessons more exciting and shows students how to plus, minus, multiply, and divide the numbers. With this technique, students are more interested in their lessons. This specific example shows that today’s education methods are more different and harder than old-fashioned methods.
Secondly, with modern technology that children have access to, it is difficult to teach children the right things. Nowadays, when parents start to learn the right behavior as a social person to their children, youngsters always tend to compare these tips which get from their parents to what they see on the Internet. As a result, these comparisons make it arduous for parents to educate their children. For instance, my uncle has two kids and he is always struggling to educate his children. His kids always disagree with the points that he makes to them. Hence, he spends more and more time to make a deal with his children. He has to do a lot of preparations before communicating and educating his children. In contrast, his father, my grandfather, was always straight to his kids and taught lessons to them at his first try. For the above reasons that I mentioned, I think it is more difficult to educate children in the current world.
In conclusion, I believe in this modern era it is much harder to educate children. Not only have teachers difficulties with children's education, but parents also have own problems to teach their youngsters.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04057279236 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80888772497 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486873508353 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2990448645 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4583333333 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216629387374 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072398744333 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04780588583 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12860418537 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317765462783 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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