Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The government has already done enough to educate people the importance of food nutrition and health eating.
Personally, for me, I totally believe that authority cannot play important role on educating people regarding knowledge of food nutrition and health eating.
To begin with, the strength of educating is unknown actually due to the fact that different people own different awareness to treat the situation. Some people who can be in possession of deep understand will allow the education to utilize in practice. But others just listen and no any comprehension. Recently, government held a speech concerning such things due to the fact that vast people got ill because of food nutrition and eating diet. And for the extent of education about the speech, some researchers made questionnaires regarding the content. As a result, almost 64% of people cannot answer the questions. For that, the research totally prove the notion of mine.
In addition, the range of education also has lots of limitation such as area. In other word, people who live in urban area can be equipped with ability of receiving the education. But on the other hand, people who live in isolated field are not very likely to have opportunity to receive the education. Data from the statistics for a ratio of ill in city is further less than in isolated area. As for the high ill people in isolated city, it proves that the influence of education cannot be spread in such area. The authentic example regarding my brother who live in mountain, he and his family never heard of knowledge of healthy diet and food nutrition and the medical advice there is also not advanced. The death of my uncle is because of lack of knowledge.
Finally, other than the problem of human themselves, the external factor will also cause some certain effects. People who have realized the significant of food nutrition and health eating are tending to purchase some healthy product or relative goods. And at that time, some bad business are able to take the chance to sell their inferior products via low price which is able to attract most targeted consumers. For instance, the interval after government publishing speech, the number of advertisement on TV begins to rapid surge and most of them are concerning medical and healthy food products with very low price. Most people are attracted by the low price and buy them. After that, most people who have eaten inferior healthy food and medical products were send to hospital and a load of journalists start to pay attention on it and report such things, which is an embody of lack of education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...e of food nutrition and health eating. To begin with, the strength of educating...
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...in practice. But others just listen and no any comprehension. Recently, government...
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...arch totally prove the notion of mine. In addition, the range of education also...
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...uncle is because of lack of knowledge. Finally, other than the problem of human...
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... begins to rapid surge and most of them are concerning medical and healthy food products with ...
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... healthy food and medical products were send to hospital and a load of journalists s...
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... on it and report such things, which is an embody of lack of education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, if, regarding, so, then, as for, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2072.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88679245283 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59949316609 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509433962264 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7944072482 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6666666667 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1904761905 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19894037756 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586407753145 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057414569816 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140940882655 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448847797374 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.