From the dawn of civilization, governments have always had a controversy about how they should distribute their budgets. In this regard, some people believe that allocating money to the arts is more significant than it is to support athletics. I have enough reasons to counter this viewpoint. I will enlarge on my reasons in following paragraphs.
First and foremost, there are several important competitions in sport fields such as Olympic. Being successful in them can make great pride for compatriots, while there is no competition in the art fields as well-known as those in sport fields. To put it in a more vivid picture, as Olympic Games draw a lot of attention, the sense of coming in first among a lot of nations can make people of a country more confident about their abilities. As a result, this confidence lets them do their duties as well as possible. Hence, huge progress can be made in that country, whereas being successful in the arts do not have so great effects that make all people of a country to feel in such a way. Since a few people have information about the arts events, people of a nation cannot reach the belief that they can overcome every problem.
Secondly, supporting athletics to receive awards in sport competitions like Olympic Games is a source of money for governments because the Olympic organizing committee allocates a great deal of money to those who come in first. On the other hand, by spending money on the arts, governments cannot make a big profit. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by my own country experience. Our governments give such a substantial present from the Asian Football Confederation that helps them to balance their budgets. That prized award was given to our government since our national football team became the champion of the AFC Asian Cup last year. Consequently, should governments support athletics by spending more money in sport fields, they can earn a considerable amount of money.
To sum up, all things considered, I firmly believe that more money should be assigned to support of athletics than it should be allocated to support the arts. Given the fact that, great satisfaction can be derived and governments can increase their earnings, if they invest money in support of sport fields.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, while, such as, as a result, as well as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91025641026 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80232949965 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1784185887 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.388888889 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94444444444 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264811820047 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0857465957261 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0802564488494 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180770627415 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681286892733 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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