It goes without saying that from ancient times to this contemporary modern era, emperors and governments have been preoccupied with the concern that their society should be provided with diverse assortments of entertainments and activities; arts and sports are no exception to this very notion. While many policy makers and practitioners hold the opinion that governments should allocate considerable amount of budget on arts, others stand at the other side of the continuum, believing that financial concern should be directed towards athletic activities like Olympic teams. As far as I am concerned, governments should prioritize art and spend more money to support arts and artistic works. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that art is a good indicator of the historical, and cultural background of a community; the support of which is a lens through which people can gain knowledge about a country. To be more specific, when governments spend financial allocation to support are, they are indirectly influence on people's long-lasting desire to become acquainted with the historical and cultural background of a society. Undoubtedly, arts are precious treasury that will quench the thirst of people who are enthusiastic to become aware of the background and revolutions that have happened in a society. An example can drive this notion home. In Iranian context, various galleries and exhibition are being set up by financial support of the government, especially in metropolitan cities of Iran which attract considerable number of tourists. When tourists and foreigner visit these art galleries, they will become familiar with the beauty, uniqueness, and elaborated works of Iranian artisan which resembles Iranian's enriched historical and cultural background. The work of Mohammad Farshchian is a great example that pave the way for different people to not only appreciate the delicateness of the work, but also to learn about the cultural and historical values of Persian people in just one piece of work.
Moreover, arts and artistic works of any kind can be considered as a good source of income for many people; thus, government's financial support can make a change in artist's way of living. To put it in other words, there are many people and individuals who should be called an artist because the handwork they produce is unique in its own. Indeed, a lot of these so-called artists afford their living subsistence by selling and auctioning their products and items. When government support these individual, they will be positively reinforce to work even harder, and as a result the society's economic status will improve as well. Under such a circumstance, more and more people will call into working as an entrepreneurial in art galleries and make themselves bloom. To put it in a more vivid picture, Turkey- being known for its clothes fashion- started up an art workshop to find talented people. Having worked in these workshops and having a full command of clothing industry, these people earned their own money and as a result the economy of Turkey flourished and boomed.
In conclusion, having the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I believe that governments should spend money on art rather than sports. Not only will people gain money through their artwork, but also art can mirror the cultural and historical value of a society.
- Tpo 3- integrated writting 3
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2892.0 1977.66487455 146% => OK
No of words: 551.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24863883848 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89589438024 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 282.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511796733212 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 896.4 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.7645401481 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.6 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.55 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224537386971 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744586250313 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692037358193 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155144730997 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046033026972 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 150.0 86.8835125448 173% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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