In this competitive era, many students are trying to maintain their grades highly. They are always concern about their score. There is an argument that grades encourage students to learn. I disagree with this statement. I have two reasons for this which I will explore in this essay.
To begin with, grades can lead students to suicide. There are many news about students killing themselves because some parents give a lot of burdens to their child by pressuring them with their grades. Hence, they cannot be free from their stress. They become lose interested in study. I have a good example for this. One of my former friends is one of these cases. Her parents always expected her to get a good grade. She, of course, got many loads from her parents. She spoke her mind that she was in a hard circumstance.
Furthermore, students can have unhealthy competition. Think about “Sky Castle”. It was a very famous drama in my country. The author of the drama wrote a critical story about the tragedy fact of Korea’s education system. According to the drama, students compete seriously to be a doctor. Moreover, children tend to hate each other because of parents comparing them to each other. They want to satisfy their parents by getting a good grade than others. It can cause terrible affairs inversely.
In conclusion, I disagree that grade encourage students to learn. These are my reasons: it can be a burden to students. Plus, students can have unhealthy competition which results to hatred.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...can lead students to suicide. There are many news about students killing themselves ...
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Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun news seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much news', 'a good deal of news'.
Suggestion: much news; a good deal of news
...can lead students to suicide. There are many news about students killing themselves becau...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, moreover, so, in conclusion, of course, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 13.8261648746 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1257.0 1977.66487455 64% => OK
No of words: 255.0 407.700716846 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92941176471 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54988220699 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 212.727598566 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564705882353 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 382.5 618.680645161 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 10.0 20.1344086022 50% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.5278984642 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 50.28 100.406767564 50% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 10.2 20.6045352989 50% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.92 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173047444767 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574690004142 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0899993088688 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121807096995 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616223079124 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.79 58.1214874552 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.83 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.0 10.002688172 40% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.0 10.0537634409 60% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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