In today’s societies, the question of whether improving schools is a critical factor in country’s developments has become a controversial issue among people in many camps and circles. Different people have diverse types of responses to this topic based on their cultural, social, or even familial backgrounds. However, as far as I’m concerned, I believed that improvements in schools have a lot of advantages for countries’ developments for some reasons that I elaborate them in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the first thing immediately comes to mind is that today’s child will build the future of their communities. So, if government focus to ameliorate schools in terms of its quality as well as its numbers, the country will have more educated students. Therefore, this student can involve in a various part of science and help their country to improve in diverse subjects. Let’s me make a brief explanation about that. Based on the researches that were published in a well-known journal, scientist found out that each dollar that government spent in the school’ and preschools’ improvement will help this government to save seven dollars in twenty years later.
Another noteworthy aspect that should be mentioned is that educational systems are integrated to each others. It means that if a country spends its budget to improve its school’s programs, it will help to improve their upper educational system like university as well. Better university quality guaranteed that this country will have sufficient proficient person in different fields that each country may be needed. Therefore, this country can improve expeditiously and constantly. Let me shed a light on my point. According to a last survey which was conducted in Iran, experts determined that if a improving school’s program implements in Iran, the quality of universities’ entrance will improve significantly. So, universities’ professors can teach more things to their students. Thus, Iran can experience more master graduated students who help their country to step in improvement path.
Broadly speaking, there are a plenty of reasons to show that improving schools is essential for country’s developing. This improving not only lets each country to have a more educated students with more beneficial knowledge but also improves the universities level. Hence, It is necessary that any country dedicate enough money to improve their schools’ and even preschools’ programs.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 28, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
In today's societies, the question of whether improving schools is a critical factor ...
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Line 5, column 604, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, broadly speaking, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61979166667 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31557771068 2.67179642975 124% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5546875 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3685993781 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.578947368 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2105263158 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126584931304 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466473035674 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406188844324 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0979167785232 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295456382585 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 10.9000537634 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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