We can not learn everything in this world because there are indefinite areas for study. There is a debate amid people, whether it is better to learn dfifferent fields of study, or to concentrate in only one field of study. Personally, I believe that it is better to study many academic subjects than just studying only one field. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, many subjects are interdisciplinary, so that it is better to study various subjects matter, which might be useful to understand different types of problem. When we have knowledge about the various fields, then we can solve the problem related to others fields of study, so that our prestige in the society will be improved. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. After my graduation from Agriculture and Forestry University, Nepal, I had two options in M.Sc. Agriculture, whether to study single subjects, or to take variety of discipline. I chose variety of courses in my master level. Knowledge about the various fields was more applicable when I started my career as an agriculture officer at Baglung. It is easier for me to deal with the farmers having different types of problem such as diseases, insects, variety selection, agronomic practices, etc. Since I have knowledge about the various fields of agriculture, I was able to solve the problems of farmers, which increases my social prestige.
Secondly, having knowledge about the various fields is also helpful in doing part-time job, so that we can earn more money. If we have free time then that time can be used to do part-time job, provided that you have knowledge on various subjects matter. For instance, my brother major field of study is physics, and he teaches physics in Birendra Multiple Campus. He also can teach matematics, since he has a good understanding of the mathematics. He does part-time mathematics teaching in Sagarmatha education center, and earns more than 30,000 NPR per month. So, if you have knowledge about the various fields of study then you can earn more amount of money by doing part-time job.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that having a knowledge on variety of subjects is better than studying single subject. This is because by studying different subjects, we can solve the problems of various inter-related fields, and because we can get more amount of money from part-time job.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 486, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Sc
...iversity, Nepal, I had two options in M.Sc. Agriculture, whether to study single s...
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Line 3, column 561, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d earns more than 30,000 NPR per month. So, if you have knowledge about the various fi...
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Line 4, column 48, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'knowledge'.
Suggestion: knowledge
...lusion, I am of the opinion that having a knowledge on variety of subjects is better than s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, as for, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, of course, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2015.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9387254902 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78856409736 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475490196078 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3390630039 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.75 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205751630524 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714913870897 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0883043471433 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137091682875 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0168512871147 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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