Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for people to choose jobs that come with high salaries even though they do not enjoy doing it than to choose jobs that they enjoy but come with low salaries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People tend to choose their career regarding the extent of possible income and their personal enjoyment because both of these things are significant. However, the important question is which one of them is more essential for choice of professions. I believe that having an occupation that I appreciate is beneficial for me. I feel this way for two main reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, individuals will improve their feelings and emotions, so they can keep improve their social relationships. When people do what they appreciate, they will find enjoyment from their job. Hence, their emotions will be enhanced significantly thanks to their pleasure obtained from job. As a result, they can keep being polished to their family members, close friends, and co-workers. For instance, last year, I was tutoring mathematics because I love mathematics and teaching altogether although my income was poor. I was so merry about my job that I even forgot about the salary. Later on, I realized that this enjoyment influenced other aspects of my life, in particular, communication with others. Eventually, I realized that I could get polite with others thanks to my job. To sum up, individuals can enhance their relationships with others by doing the job they like thanks to their positive emotions.
Secondly, over time, because people's productivity can be sufficient, they are likely to improve their positions, in turn, salaries. That people earn a little amount of money in the beginning does not necessarily means that they will end up receiving impoverished payment until the end. People usually maximize their potential if they carry out what they love, so an amount of task they accomplish will be huge thanks to their attitude. Thereby, their supervisor are likely to improve positions of hard-working members of their organizations. Thus, people who accomplish jobs that they enjoy will start earning an enough money before long. Long story short, the small extent of income is only temporary because employees tend to be employed if they appreciate their occupation.
In summation, I think that people need to follow their willingness rather than salary when they choose their job. This is because their general life will be enhanced, and they can increase their salary soon by working hard.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 213, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'mean'
Suggestion: mean
...y in the beginning does not necessarily means that they will end up receiving impover...
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Line 5, column 611, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'enough money'.
Suggestion: enough money
...jobs that they enjoy will start earning an enough money before long. Long story short, the smal...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, i feel, i think, in particular, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1975.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2110817942 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7917138381 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554089709763 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.3708100883 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.0476190476 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0476190476 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7619047619 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226145554079 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795728115858 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677181864411 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143545374411 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0533686358088 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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