Do you agree or disagree? It is better to work with your own computer and telephone at your home than work in your company's office.
People's way of working may heavily influence their emotions and productivity. Therefore, workers should carefully choose an appropriate place where they carry out their tasks in order to improve the efficiency of their performance. Personally, I believe that accomplishing assignments at home is beneficial for not only employees but also nature. I have two rationales for holding this opinion, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, individuals will not produce harmful fumes by commuting to their job constantly, which signifies that pollutant substances in the atmosphere will diminish. Nowadays, even white-collar workers are creating air pollution by driving their private mobiles to go to and from their office. However, if the majority of workers start doing their job at their house, the extent of carbon dioxide in the environment will be reduced significantly. To illustrate thoroughly, I would like to provide an example of my hometown. In Mongolia, my native nation, poisonous particles in the atmosphere had been at a dangerous level until the authorities put the capital of Mongolia under lockdown due to a spread of "COVID-19". Since the quarantine, employees began working at their homes, so they stopped utilizing their vehicles to reach their office. Afterward, the toxic substances decreased much such that a number of ailments caused by the pollution diminished. If people continue working at their houses irrespective of any outbreak of communicable disease, the general health of dwellers will increase. This example demonstrates a positive impact on our ambient, in turn, our well-being.
Secondly, workers will be less exposed to depression at their homes, compared to office. Many individuals get anxious because of the workloads of their assignments; thus, they start bemoaning about the difficulty with their co-workers. Unfortunately, they do not recognize that their complain actually affect others' feelings negatively. Later on, other people whose emotions were fine will also become overwrought because of the unpleasant environment at their office. For instance, my working partners were always expressing their sadness at our company, so I had been stress-prone by virtue of their attitude until this year. Conversely, I initiated accomplishing tasks at my accommodation from this year, which means I am not spending time with others who have resentful thoughts about their job. For this reason, I am happier and more satisfied with my job and circumstances. I am certain that most people's emotions will get better if they work at their homes.
In summation, I think that doing the job at home is much adequate means for not only me, but others as well. This is because our environment and feelings will get better.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, conversely, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2369.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42105263158 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09140021429 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553775743707 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.355574377 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73913043478 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0996940815275 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0365477461914 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320550028753 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.074851613451 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159277766816 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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