Nowadays, with these rapid changes in the world, individuals should take a risk in new subjects. In this condition, many people believe that elderly people should not put their selves in danger and take a risk for learning new things, and only youth can figure out a way for a new subject. I, totally, disagree with this viewpoint due to several conspicuous reasons which will be elaborated as follows.
To begin with, doing a new energetic work rises life expectancy in old people keenly. Often 30% of a population in society is old, and if governments try to use this potential energy in a positive way, it has a noticeable impact on social growth. Besides, elderly people feel that they are useful for their communities, which helps them to live healthier. An example can drive this notion dramatically home. My grandfather used to stay home when he got retired without any remarkable activities. After a while, he decided to accompany in farmers’ union to manage the water deficiency, which elated him. Therefore, to increase life expectancy in elderly people, they should take the risk of new things which.
Additionally, elderly people have more experience, which can assist them to deal with new risky activities easier. They can use their experience to better fill the gaps in a particular issue, and consequently, develop it. The previous example can also shed some light on this subject. My grandfather did not have any experience in managing water deficiency, and he was not a professional person in this area. However, he could best deal with this issue for he had a lot of knowledge in managing, and he was a good leader before he got retired.
In conclusion, there are several reasonable reasons which can be persuasive enough to challenge the topic. I, personally, believe that elderly people can take risks to learn new things and support my idea in the previous paragraphs.
- To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better to take risks and explore new things when you are older than when you are young 73
- If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying 70
- Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 88
- Do you agree or disagree？ It is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise. Explain your answer with examples and specific reasons. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...as a good leader before he got retired. In conclusion, there are several reasona...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'risks learning'.
Suggestion: risks learning
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, however, if, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97805642633 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7970077803 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576802507837 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.0109194173 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4117647059 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7647058824 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120516655829 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.042467957728 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450351836127 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0815552034399 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032217059593 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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