Nowadays, we have heard a lot of news about well-known athletes and entertainers, which sometimes makes us sad, surprised, or even amazed. Although these situations corrupt their privacy and hesitate them, I believe that it is the cost of their achievement. I support my idea with several conspicuous reasons as follows.
Firstly, the most significant reason which makes them specialized and famed is that people can easily get information about them by searching on social media, such as internet and television. Famous people should accept this fact that if they want to be well-known, they have to accept others’ curiosity in their life. In other words, they have a trade-off between having privacy and being famous. Moreover, they sometimes advertise or support something or someone which may completely different from their expertise. Since they want to be in society’s eyes, they cannot ask people to focus on one part of their life. Therefore, they have to accept to lose their privacy to be known in more proportion of society and gained more income.
Secondly, many individuals imitate famous people's lifestyle as they want to know how to gain the achieved position that famous people have. Therefore, they start searching on their life. This situation is more common for children who want to find the best way to be like their hero. An example of this is a Moroccan football player whose name eludes me at the moment. He always wished and tried to be like Ronaldo, who is one of the best football players in the world. Hence, he started to search on Ronaldo's biography in the past and present to find the best way of success. Finally, he achieved his goal by evaluating the correct pattern of Ronaldo lifestyle. If social media had not revealed Ronaldo’s memories and his lifestyle, many people would not know him as much as now.
In conclusion, given that fact that well-known entertainers and athletes tried hard to be famous, they have to accept this disadvantageous of their occupations, for known by ordinary people and imitated by their fans have made them succeed and earned more income.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 149, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ad, surprised, or even amazed. Although this situations corrupt their privacy and he...
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Line 5, column 43, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...condly, many individuals imitate famous peoples lifestyle as they want to know how to g...
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Line 7, column 265, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...de them succeed and earned more income.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1777.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03399433428 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73989964279 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549575070822 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5525699997 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7222222222 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6111111111 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203394359721 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693282871962 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642680868194 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136880013484 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410239869299 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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